Free to Love

The first time that she fell for him
Was watching in the light so dim
And as he slowly walked her way
She felt her heart and body sway
Her heart beat faster as he spoke
It felt that it had stopped and broke
Her breath so short it came in bursts
She realized he'd be the first

Hand in hand they walked the sands
Of the ocean by the lands
Their love was sent from high above
So fresh as it was bright young love

Her parents did not understand
To them he was just tough and tanned
They locked her in her room so tight
Knowing he would look all night
Searching and searching till day break
All in vain for his heart did ache
Casting his sail upon the ocean fair
Being apart he could not bear

Heart to heart they walked the sands
Of the ocean by the lands
Their love was sent from high above
So fresh as it was bright young love

But love will always conquer all
It will not falter fail or fall
So quietly at dead of night
He stole her from her parent's sight
Away they ran across the sea
To feel the joys of liberty
And to this day they live as one
Underneath the glorious sun

Spirit by spirit they walk the sands
Of the ocean by the lands
Their love was sent from high above
So fresh as it was bright young love

 

Reviews

[Carl]

This flows very well. I like the repeated stanza and the things you are well known for are here in abundance. The nortical backdrop. Oceans and walking on the sands. The Stealing of a heart and the longing to be together. You work very well as a collaberation and brilliantly as individuals. you love for each other is very obvious and that shines through in all your peices

[April Child]

Very nice job you two!

[Dead Angel]

wow, great story line and the rhyming was so beautiful!! i love the "chorus" of the peom, very romantic. i guess love does conquer all, at least according to this poem. well done, i really enjoyed it!! :)

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Beautifully written, and flowed wonderfully. Great collaboration, you two.


Great Write.

[Sqeaver]

Great Collaboration. I like the form and flow. Great write.

[Fran Marie]

A most beautiful colaboration so very well penned and expressed~Great Job! you two~Fran

[E. M. Murren]

This is so lovely. It bounces gracefully and delightfully. Beautiful work.

[Gary H]

I think this smoulders along very beautifully. Wonderfully well thought out between the two of you. Where is the location for this? Seems as though it's not England!

[Sally Edwards]

Beautifully written, almost felt like a song,wonderful imagery and great storytelling.

[Nicholas Hallows]

This is an uplifting piece. Song-like with the repetitive quatrains resembling choruses. I like how these echo the growing connection, first through hands, then hearts and finally souls. Well written. NH

[Cece]

love is never to be understood
by others they not know
the intensity one feels for the other

never stop the intensity you feel
never stop expressing what you feel
never stop writing what you feel