Free to Love

The first time that she fell for him
Was watching in the light so dim
And as he slowly walked her way
She felt her heart and body sway
Her heart beat faster as he spoke
It felt that it had stopped and broke
Her breath so short it came in bursts
She realized he'd be the first

Hand in hand they walked the sands
Of the ocean by the lands
Their love was sent from high above
So fresh as it was bright young love

Her parents did not understand
To them he was just tough and tanned
They locked her in her room so tight
Knowing he would look all night
Searching and searching till day break
All in vain for his heart did ache
Casting his sail upon the ocean fair
Being apart he could not bear

Heart to heart they walked the sands
Of the ocean by the lands
Their love was sent from high above
So fresh as it was bright young love

But love will always conquer all
It will not falter fail or fall
So quietly at dead of night
He stole her from her parent's sight
Away they ran across the sea
To feel the joys of liberty
And to this day they live as one
Underneath the glorious sun

Spirit by spirit they walk the sands
Of the ocean by the lands
Their love was sent from high above
So fresh as it was bright young love

 

Reviews

[Carl]

This flows very well. I like the repeated stanza and the things you are well known for are here in abundance. The nortical backdrop. Oceans and walking on the sands. The Stealing of a heart and the longing to be together. You work very well as a collaberation and brilliantly as individuals. you love for each other is very obvious and that shines through in all your peices

[Ray Hamilton]

What an uplifting read for me
I enjoyed this
I'm a sucker for happy endings

With my life the only thing that is for sure is there will be an end LOL
Well done
Ray

[L.G. Knight]

Very sweet! Moral: love conquers all.... great story! Love the repeated stanzas its like song lyrics.... nicely done!

~Frances~

[Amor-de-angel]

Stunning, I loved the smaller stanzas, they just lifted it. Well done you two

[Anne Martin]

This is a lovely piece. Some stanzas flow better than others; the rhythm just doesn't feel right at times - one line here, a couple there. I do like the image, though, and it has a good feel to it.

[Kristin Brecoe]

oooh. this is a beautiful piece! But I got one question...Casing his sail upon the ocean fair
Do you mean casting?

-Kristin.

i think i may add this to my favorites. do you mind accepting a friend request?

[Just Manoosh]

Honest untainted love, pure and undisturbed ...... until someone smashes it. A lovely peace, very rounded and well thought out, sigh if only.... Hugs. Mx

[Vatsayayana]

Ahhh.... you have me quite smitten.
Beautiful. Fresh. Stunning.
Love.... nothing else like it!

[Catrinka]

Awwww I really liked this one you guys! Great pic too! Nothing quite like young love :-) Your collaberative poem made me smile - thanks!

[R J Askew]

Full on romance and with a happy ending. Uplifting.