Brightly Unaffected

 

 

Brightly Unaffected

 

What of this sun that warms my back

Tempting me to turn around

Pleading for my attention

Over an anxious landscape of questions

Geometric outcroppings of thought

And life goes on beyond its light

 

Blue sky swan dives fall eternal

On the brink of feelings conjured

Draping over azure dreams

Becoming slower minutes crawling

Down wretched pathways

Leading to all voided expectations

 

Yet time will come and go

As high above me lay sheltered wishes

Which I harness in tethered ideas

Collecting on shoulders of heated display

Brushing off doubts uninspired

Turning to face this sun…brightly unaffected

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Lily Finch]

'yet time will come and go'...so true ......hope you come back.soon..

[TL Boehm]

Over an anxious landscape of questions
Geometric outcroppings of thought
love the way you go from the abstract to concrete from view to thought in this one.

[Stephen]

Hey, Pal ... Yesterday, I read your one write called "Heart String Sorrow" .. Umm ..& after reading that write, I was curious to read your some more stuffs but as I browsed again to your profile .. it`s showed me that you`ve gone from here. Yeah, I know .. You`d closed your account but Pal ... let me tell ya one thing .. "No matter how many problems come on our life, no matter how the time is worst or good -- we all gotta walk with the time without caring of good or bad." You`ve got a talent and I must say that you should have to be on this site because I loved reading your stuffs and i`m sure that other writers too love reading your stuffs. Anyway, it`s all up to you .. you stay on here or not! Decide it yourself! To be honey, you`ve got a sexy talent of writing, Pal ...

Howsoever, I really loved this write. It`s so real and so precious to read --- It`s short but much impressive. I hope to read your more stuffs if you don`t close your account again. Anyway, keep writing and keep believing in yourself!

[Cassie]

No wonder the 6 libraries...I enjoyed enjoyed...I really missed reading you...

[Brittany Zedalis]

Ah, I have missed reading your poetry. :]

[Jack...]

Nice to see you again Brittinay. Thank you so much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the oxymoron of "brightly unaffected"

"turn around, bright eyes---every now and then i fall apart"

and the sun taunts us...and we try not to turn around...look him in the eye...because if we do he will burn our mind...and words will become tethered ideas unable to loosen themselves.

[Jack...]

Thank you for visiting today Jacob.

[MsJewel]

Just the poem I needed to read to lift my spirits today Jack.

Yet time will come and go
As high above me lay sheltered wishes
Which I harness in tethered ideas
Collecting on shoulders of heated display
Brushing off doubts uninspired
Turning to face this sun…brightly unaffected

Simply lovely. :) Julie

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend.

[Rita L. Sev]

In all of your beautiful imagery and depth of this piece, these lines:
Pleading for my attention
Over an anxious landscape of questions...

Like you were looking in on my day...

[Jack...]

Happy this one touched you Rita. Thank you so very much.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Incredible write, Jack. So many tangible lines!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Travis.

[RichGee]

Another beautiful piece Jack...
I Shall call you Sun...Because you shine like one...

[Jack...]

Thanks Dad. I appreciate your kind words Rich.

[RichGee]

Hahaha! My pleasure sir.