Only Seventeen

Thank you Freida for the photo suggestion.

 

Only Seventeen

 

 

There you sit

In your red crushed velvet jacket

Swaying to the music

A ribbon in your hair

 

Gazing at the bad boys

In sneakers torn and tattered

Smoking in the corner

You just can’t help but stare

 

Silhouette desires

Pearls form your neckline

Sweetly blowing kisses

Below the neon light

 

Can’t they hear your whispers

Seeking merely favors

Nothing past tomorrow

For only but tonight

 

Longing for a taste

Vodka on the counter

Fingers crossed and hoping

Waiting to be seen

 

Lonely minutes count

Stiletto heels are hurting

Could it be they’ve noticed

You’re only seventeen

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Brittany Zedalis]

I love this poem so much I can't even find the words to type, haha. Great job!

[Jack...]

Thank you Brittany. Happy you enjoyed this one.

[Justsimplyjulia]

I personally really enjoy this! I can truly relate, 'sept im only 15 haha
wonderful work Jack
-Dragon

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend. I appreciate your kind words.

[s y e]

Sometimes we do grow up too fast. Your words are the truth. Great job.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. I appreciate you always Sye.

[Cryingkate]

It's a Keeper Jack !

Very sound wise advice !
Well done!

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Connie. I appreciate your friendship more than you know.

[Cryingkate]

:-) Your a Keeper too Jack.. HEads up I'm gonna see how fast I can get thru 668 past due reviews. LOL I bet you have a lot of them in there. so please don't try to pay tit for tat . No need to reply or do return reviews, Just enjoy and don't mind me passing thru so fast ;-)

[Jack...]

No problem my friend.

[Cryingkate]

If something particular comes up and you want to reply go ahead, please do.. You'll know what to do.. I trust your judgement 100%

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wanting to be noticed, she will do anything at seventeen to matter...even if only for one night..

a moving write...at that age, we only want to be part of something...and it eats away...when we are not.

[Jack...]

That is it exactly my friend. Thanks for your kind comments.

[Sami Khalil]

I feel this poem is like a good father trying to wise up his girl or any one by soft nudges to be careful and chose the right path and not lose the innocence. Not all that glitters is gold for that fake gold will turn into dusty sorrows at the end...Excellent...:).........

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Sami. I am happy you found that meaning in this.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)..................

[Vidya Bacchus]

Children are growing up so fast these days.Their childhood is too short in this fast paced world :)

[Jack...]

You are correct. Thank you my friend.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Jack :)

[Frieda P]

When we're young and innocent we can't wait to grow up and those bad boys with their hot twinkles in their eyes and pants are always beckoning, seventeen nowadays look much like 30 did years ago. Wait til these girls get older, they're going to wish they hadn't grown up so damn fast. Unique topic Jack, and as always you nailed it with your finesse'd pen.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Frieda. I am thrilled you enjoyed this poem.