Only Seventeen

Thank you Freida for the photo suggestion.

 

Only Seventeen

 

 

There you sit

In your red crushed velvet jacket

Swaying to the music

A ribbon in your hair

 

Gazing at the bad boys

In sneakers torn and tattered

Smoking in the corner

You just can’t help but stare

 

Silhouette desires

Pearls form your neckline

Sweetly blowing kisses

Below the neon light

 

Can’t they hear your whispers

Seeking merely favors

Nothing past tomorrow

For only but tonight

 

Longing for a taste

Vodka on the counter

Fingers crossed and hoping

Waiting to be seen

 

Lonely minutes count

Stiletto heels are hurting

Could it be they’ve noticed

You’re only seventeen

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Satirical and playful, well done, good read.

[LadySoDivine]

Haha, Jack, sometimes you make me feel embarrassed of being seventeen. But nonetheless, I know so many girls just like this. Seeking attention from the wrong people by things they should not be doing and being in places they should stay away from. One of those girls used to be my dearest friend. But all of my advice fell on dead ears. I guess that sometimes there is nothing that can be done. Excellent poem, dear friend!! :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend.

[xDalliance]

Wow. Such a beautiful and true plot wrapped in an amazing arrangement of words. I really love your poems! Thank you for writing and sharing it with us! :)

[Jack...]

Thank you for your sweet comments to me. I appreciate you stopping by.

[Friya]

I think it is beautiful. Could you give me some tips on writing so well? I would really want to become an author or writer. The concept of penning down your ideas has always seemed wonderful to me, and this poem just makes that feeling even better.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much for visiting today. My advice to you is read as many poets on this site as you can...that is how I learn.

[Friya]

Will definitely do that! If its not too much to ask..maybe you can check out my writings and tell me where I can improve? It would be an honor to learn from you :D Thanks :)

[Jack...]

Sure I will.

[M.K. Jawdat]

Interesting subject you've explored here. Good job. Every line is nicely penned

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much DeaRAngel. I am happy you stopped by.

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, yes, as a teenager I wished the years ago....if only I could drink legally and go to the discos without a fake I.D. (not that I ever did of course! LOL) Makeup a little too pronounced and stiletto heels hurting, but both a symbol of pseudo maturity....one that others see right through. I enjoyed this one tremendously, Jack. Lydi**

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Lydi. Discos with a fake ID...why does that sound familiar to me?

[Lydia Shutter]

Gee, I dunno! :)

[Zahra]

wow cute image, loved it. And clever write, nice

[Jack...]

Thank you my friend.

[Troy Henson]

That moment in life where wishing you were older than you are. I remember those days. Now that life's passing me by so quickly I long for those days back.

Very nice Jack

[Jack...]

I know exactly what you mean Troy. Thanks so much.

[MsJewel]

Oh...to be 17 again and wishing I were 25...if I knew then what I know now, I would have traded those stilletto heels and bad boys for sneakers and bubble gum (they last longer and taste sweeter and sure the hell don't hurt your feet)

Hugs, Julie

[Jack...]

Smiling here Julie. Love this review. Thanks so much for your sweet words and humor this morning.

[Rita L. Sev]

Such an awkward point in life - that in-between, trying to fit in, trying to figure out the world... and when the mistakes become so much bigger... I've known her, Jack... you pained her perfectly.

[Jack...]

Thanks Rita. You are always so kind to me...I appreciate you.