Out of sand

Out of sand

 

Staring at the hourglass

Counting each tiny grain of life

Moments that passed before

Resting in a pyramid pile, the lower half…youth

White and pure, unwanted beach’s breath

Identical but different…used

 

Age remains atop the vessel

Seeping in centered illusions

Falling through a narrow passage

Seconds, minutes, hours…it descends

Plain and boring, nothing much here to see

Routine trickles of tired drippings

 

Then…one granule an unusual shade…effervescent

A single speck glistens…morning glory blue

Illumined before my eyes…finding the middle

Spinning in the gritted whirlpool and I realize…it is you

This is my time of love…I see it clearly

As it moves lower…leaving me…spiraling towards memories

 

Frantically I shake the container, it changes not

Losing you…watching…in panic’d wave smashing the glass

Tiny slivers lace the pieces, sharp, razor like

Sifting through hysterically, searching for you…my fingers

Sliced and oozing…crimson floods the mound

Everything is tinted sorrow…it all looks the same

 

You are gone, swept up in life’s saturation

And still I bleed…tears mingling

Drenched in loss of a broken heart

Lying in a dampened dune of garnet puddles

Becoming one with the earth below…

I have lost you…I am out of sand….

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Captcha - Downtake

Reviews

[Kristina Moulaison]

This is wonderfully done! The imagery of the hourglass so resonated with me and then it plays out like a thriller with a surprise twist, this unplanned horror...such poignant, identifiable imagery, so well illustrating this losing of time, of self....our inability to go back, put the pieces back in their place and how it slices and scars us, leaves us unhinged, lifeless as it slips through our fingers. So well done!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Kristina. This was an idea I had Saturday morning, then through a sleepless Saturday night until I finally sat down and wrote it Sunday morning. It kind of kept me suspended until I did. I appreciate your kindness today.

[Kristina Moulaison]

I know the feeling. :) This one was worth all the effort to create...really good!

[Brittany Zedalis]

Wow, this pulled me in and kept me there.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Brittany. Have I mentioned I love the new photo?

[Brittany Zedalis]

Haha, you might have, I'm not sure. Thank you!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Sometimes the sands of time runs out faster for those we love and we are left shaking the glass for a glimpse of what we lost.

[Jack...]

And sometimes it runs out for us. Thanks so much Vidya. I feel fortunate to have friends like you who read and leave such nice comments on my poetry

[Vidya Bacchus]

It is very easy to say nice things about your poetry because they are all so lovely.You are welcome my friend Jack:)

[Angel]

The love of his life has died...and he must now live in a world where she is no longer.
Downtake, indeed, my friend.

[Jack...]

Thank you Angel. I am always thrilled when you stop by.

[Madalyn Beck]

Word Painter Jack, you have done it again. Phenomenal. This is a beautiful and tragic write. This is my absolute favorite part:

"Frantically I shake the container, it changes not
Losing you…watching…in panic’d wave smashing the glass
Tiny slivers lace the pieces, sharp, razor like
Sifting through hysterically, searching for you…my fingers
Sliced and oozing…crimson floods the mound
Everything is tinted sorrow…it all looks the same"

Absolutely brilliant!! xo :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for those kind words Madalyn. I am more than thrilled you enjoyed this one.

[Rita L. Sev]

Wonderful analogy, Jack. To see time pass quickly is so much harder when it is someone we love.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Rita. I always appreciate your visits

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Wow Jack this caught my eye! I have a thing about writing about time and I use the hour glass a lot. I must say was wrote very profound in a sad cry of loss, But we are scared to the end some no1 ever sees takes time for. You did great my friend:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Jon. I appreciate your kindness today.

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Same here my friend:) Your very welcome.

[Tina Louise UK]

How uniquely touching Jack, so very beautiful :) x

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Tia. I always appreciate your kindness to me.

[Shirlena]

How sad watching love spirit away and to have to watch, nothing you can do. I imagine how helpless it must be peering from the other side of the glass watching as it escapes. I hope I'm never in that situation. I had a girlfriend that was in a similar situation. She cried on my shoulder for six months. I was glad to be there for her. This is lovely Jack but so heart wrenching.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much my friend. Unfortunately I have experienced this...but lived to tell about it. :) I appreciate your kindness Shirlena.

[Shirlena]

You are so welcomed Jack.

[MsJewel]

Wow Jack! Incredible use of metaphor in this heartfelt poem. I find beauty even in your saddest poems - you never cease to amaze me

:) Julie

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend. This one burned a hole in my brain all weekend until I wrote it. I am happy you stopped by and I am always thrilled by the kindness you show me.