Granite Dominoes

 

 

Granite Dominoes

 

 

The soft earth yields, I watched from above

Little by little it opens, inviting

Rectangular spaces of mudded thoughts,

sifted by spade, piled of fear

 

Granite dominoes stand in lined support,

dates moistened by dew…counting

Carved in regrets once felt,

loves never shared

 

Voices from the trees cackle,

laughter it seems brings the sun

Good riddance on fawning meadows breathes

and the sky turns to red

 

Applause echoes valley’d intersections

Dirt roads meet dead end byways

Tarps are draped in fielded mistings

and I see it all

 

Life goes on even if in minus,

faux tears fill tissues, a scented kind

all the while checking their watches

hoping for a quick release

 

Oak and imitation gold are lowered, polished indignity

Carnations are tossed, dying as they fly

No one remains…remains

except the quickly forgotten…

 

Reviews

[s y e]

I guess this is life Jack. Quite a dark poem but I like it. You write such truth and honesty in your words as always and it touches me. I think we can sometimes be a domino though. However, once we fall - there is no way of getting back up....

Lovely.

[Jack...]

Sye, we can all get back up...just sometimes when we do the scenery has changed. Thanks so very much my friend.

[A. Amos]

Life goes on even if in minus,
faux tears fill tissues, a scented kind
all the while checking their watches
hoping for a quick release

Life boes Jack very well written, another good piece thanks for sharing

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much my friend.

[Pryde Foltz]

Oak and imitation gold are lowered, polished indignity
Carnations are tossed, dying as they fly
No one remains…remains
except the quickly forgotten…

From dust to regret, I suppose. This one really touched me.

[Jack...]

Thanks Pryde, I always look forward to what you have to say about my poetry. Happy you enjoyed this.

[Lyn Anderson]

I like this. The imagery is beautiful, and the word choice superb

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much KL. I always enjoy when you visit my world.

[Lily Mae]

It seems like so many are diving into the places of void, body, mind and spirit. It's not a bad thing to delve into the darker parts of who we are or our world around us...because it helps us better appreciate the light.
Kiss the Granite...let it go and embrace the light:) xo

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Lily Mae. Sometimes it is good to look and understand all that is around us...

[Lily Mae]

Yes it's a part of what keeps us balanced .. Excellent write..

[Raymond Federle]

This is kind of a dark piece for you. I like what I'm reading here. Maybe there is more dark things floating around in there? ha! Excellent piece Jack! :)

[Jack...]

My friend, I can be dark for darkness finds me in all steps in life. Thanks so much my friend.

[B-poet]

Loved the written illustration element you've displayed here Jack. You have a very unique & authentic style you can claim as your own. Great work here my friend. An unforgettable read. :)

[Jack...]

Thanks for this awesome review. I think my style changes on a daily basis based on what I learn from reading other fantastic poets on this site.

[Brittany Zedalis]

I really enjoyed reading this one. The vocabulary you used is awesome, as it imagery. Great job!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Brittany. Your kindness is my smile.