Tear'd Goodbyes

Tear’d Goodbyes

 

Memories fall like fractured dominoes in an empty field,

one by one touching each other,

small black blocks containing pieces of my shattered heart,

white dots counting sleepless hours

 

Hot coffee turns cold from staring

eastward towards a mockingly vanishing horizon,

curving at the corners in smile like fashion,

sneering as sunlight reflects its meaning

 

Butterflies come alive in my stomach…again

Fluttering uneasiness as time counts down and cocoons open,

pastel wings of fading brilliance wave,

only to die, drowned within these tear’d goodbyes

 

I sit here, hands folded under my chin,

dreaming of what could have been through blurred wishes,

understanding that my feelings don’t matter

and realizing that they probably never will

 

There will be no sunrise today…as the dominoes fall

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Brittany Zedalis]

Jack, this is just so beautiful. :]

[Jack...]

Thank you Brittany.

[Lyn Anderson]

I love this. It is outstandingly beautiful and poignant, and the imagery and metaphor is superb

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend.

[Marie]

Very sad...the dominoes fall, and the sus doesn't rise...

[Jack...]

That's right Marie. Thanks so much.

[Emerald Seas]

Both, music and poem, are lovely! Clinging melancholy... beautiful sorrow... Two thoughts that come to mind as I read and listen. You're very talented, Jack-Jack. :)

That tune - sits with you... Really like it! (I know my response reads choppy, but I'm listening!!!) ;)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend. Happy you enjoyed both. Wrote the poem and then composed on piano how it made me feel.

[MsJewel]

You have penned another one of those poems that just curls right up in my heart.
dreaming of what could have been through blurred wishes - something I have done time and time again... if only...

100/100 teardrops on my pillow

[Jack...]

Thank you Julie. I appreciate your sweet words to me today. I am thrilled you enjoyed this

[A. Amos]

Jack this work of your's will connect with many, as this pain we all have felt.... Good read

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend.

[Frieda P]

I'm not sure which is more affecting, your words or you sadly tune'd music, they're both beautiful in a melancholic way, together, they're a tearjerker Jack. Always pen'd to perfection my friend.

[Jack...]

Thank you Frieda. Thank you for everything. Your kindness is always a wonderul gift to me.

[Sami Khalil]

A great metaphor of the dominoes falling Jack. The pain that ensues, the scramble to fix the past, the race to catch up with her. We feel like we lost a gem out of our hands...A great write...:)...............

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Sami. I appreciate your kindness.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...Any time...:)........................

[Mark]

A dear friend once told me that I only want what I can't have. I've felt this pain many times. The clear honesty of this poem hits me in the heart Jack. I feel it brother.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. Funny I have been told the very same thing.

[Tina Louise UK]

Such an emotional piece, beautifully somber...really loved it :) x

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Tia.