A Million Tiny Pieces

Oh how I wish I could keep it together

 

 

 

A Million Tiny Pieces

 

 

Taken while you wept on clustered fears of empty dreams,

broken remnants shuttered as in some storm cloud cellar

and yet the pain seeps through tiny cracks

invading every pore, seeking that which keeps fracturing

 

Puddles form at frozen feet, unable to move, chilled of anguish,

sub-zero burdens slither their way into the mind’s endless pathways,

hiding in corners, darkened at angular positions,

wedges of meeting points sheltering these evil thoughts

 

Falling on tender knees, hands clenched, pleading on tear drop pages

emotions, these concrete wishes stained on thin lines

appear from chained memories, tethered to branchless trees,

striking swiftly as I watch your heart shatter…

 

into a million tiny pieces on the floor…and I with it

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Marie]

I know. My heart is breaking now for people around me...

[Jack...]

Thank so much Marie. Is your heart breaking for me too?

[Marie]

If you are sad, then my heart is breaking for you too...

[Latifa]

Puddles form at frozen feet, unable to move, chilled of anguish,
sub-zero burdens slither their way into the mind’s endless pathways,
hiding in corners, darkened at angular positions,
wedges of meeting points sheltering these evil thoughts
you are one of my favorite poets on writerscafe Jack sincerly your poems penetrate the heart directly

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Latifa. That is a huge compliment and it really touches my heart.

[Latifa]

my pleasure

[SyberRose]

Very emotive write Jack...life has many agonies...a heartrending read from you...nicely done as always.Rose

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Rose.

[Pryde Foltz]

Falling on tender knees, hands clenched, pleading on tear drop pages
emotions, these concrete wishes stained on thin lines
appear from chained memories, tethered to branchless trees,
striking swiftly as I watch your heart shatter…

into a million tiny pieces on the floor…and I with i

Nothing is more painful than watching one we love suffer. Great write, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Pryde. I know, it is an extremely disabling feelings.

[Cassie]

I couldnt agree more with Julie, you have a very good heart and it shows in your poetry.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Sunshine.

[MsJewel]

You have a beautiful heart Jack and it shines in every line of your poem.

:) Julie

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Julie. I appreciate your sweet words to me.

[Lyn Anderson]

I am not much of a poetic analyst, I tend to comment more on grammar and form. However, this one I get tremendous empathy from the author, as he sees someone in pain and weeps and feels what that person feels.

[Jack...]

And you would be correct my friend. Thanks so much.

[Jeannear]

very nice poem thanks for sharing

[Jack...]

Thank you so much for reading. I appreciate your kindness.

[Shaquana Adams]

I like this concept. Nicely penned Jack. Great work! :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much.

[Shnookums]

This is really good! You are a really good poet.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much.