Ocean's Fury

Just bored.....

 

 

Ocean’s Fury

 

Clouds of fire on the sky

Furious the swelling sea

Depths below do call my name

O’ say what shall become of me

 

Rocked aboard this flailing ship

Danced about the angry waves

Let me find the light of day

Let not this ocean be my grave

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Rainbow-Ribbons]

I could feel the raging ocean with her wild waves; I could hear the winds howling; I could see the ship rocking from side to side dancing on the stormy seas. GREAT imagery here!!!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words.

[Claire in VA]

I felt myself swaying as I read these lines! Truly. I especially like the rhythm in the first two lines of the second stanza. Those words just flow extremely well.

I very much enjoyed this poem.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Claire for sailing with me today.

[Marie]

The ocean can befurious at times...but this poem holds a spark of beauty...

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Marie

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem felt like a sailor prayer. The sea is cold hearten. The strong description allowed the reader to fall into the story in the poetry. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. I appreciate your kindness today.

[Diana]

"Depths below do call my name
O’ say what shall become of me"- Intense. I feel the sense of impending doom.

"Let not this ocean be my grave." Say it ain't so. Great write, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Diana. It is so nice to see you. Where have you been hiding? In the snow? :)

[Diana]

Yeah, basically. I dig myself out on the daily.

[00000000000000000000000..]

I see a raging sea of emotion, We all feel a storm once in awhile, Very profound Jack:)

[Jack...]

Thanks my friend. I got a little seasick writing this one. :)

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Lol Jack :) welcome my friend:)

[Latifa]

Let not this ocean be my grave
I love the last line, amazing Jack
you never fail to deliver.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Latifa. I am thrilled you enjoyed this little offering.

[Latifa]

you're very welcome

[Frieda P]

Compelling read Jack, you packed a ton of powerful emotions into this one. I felt as if I couldn't catch my breath in those few lines. I always have a life line if you need one. Now where's that Dramamine? ;-)

[Jack...]

Thank so much Frieda. I was bored yesterday so I set sail but forgot to check the weather channel before I hoisted anchor. :) I appreciate you my friend.

[Frieda P]

Ha would have been good if you ended up in Belize eh? ;-)

[Jack...]

I couldn't...you weren't on board.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Feeling weak and helpless --asking for support to continue onward.
Being pulled about and trying to hang on...
asking for help.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Josie for stopping by.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

U R WELCOME!

[Mockingbird]

conveys our utter helplessness and vulnerability being out there on the ocean. drowning in the ocean is my biggest phobia and this evokes panic and fear. excellent poem.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much. Happy you read it on dry land.