Passion'd Mountain Top

Passion’d Mountain Top

 

The air is so much thinner here

Miles find my eyes gazing,

valleys wave in gardenia gestures

and foot prints form in seeking patterns

 

Smooth stone of rain drop kisses

falls steep in overwhelming beauty

as I reach for a few more steps

of overlooking apex in snowcapped dreams

 

From this height far above

the sleeping village and sunset ribbons

I can see, more than the mind can imagine

yet not father than my soul can reach

 

As heart beats in mosaic designs

echo from peak to peak,

they flow on zephyrs of silver clouded beauty,

settling upon your tender skin

 

Always when twilight horizons form in the east

and starlight canopies unfold

my love soars on breathless whispers

from this passion’d  mountain top…endlessly to you

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Gabriel]

Very peaceful. I liked it!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much

[Brittany Zedalis]

I love mountains so the title of this caught my attention. This is just so very beautiful. :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much.

[Shaquana Adams]

Wow. This poem is just overflowing with love. I really loved the imagery and the passion in your words. Thank you for sharing this Jack!

[Jack...]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment my friend.

[Shaquana Adams]

You're welcome :) Anytime!

[Lyn Anderson]

You have a very gushy soul. But your writing, is decidedly not gushy, and very well-executed.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much. Gushy soul huh...I think I like that. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

I hear the wheels turning for a poem.:)

[Jack...]

Damn, I meant to oil those things before I came on here today...oh well, too late now.

[Frieda P]

Ahhh, finally a breath of fresh air Jack. Gardenia gestures and raindrop kisses, oh my....lovin' 'starlight canopies unfold', I think I might hang out here for the rest of the day....*sigh*

100 zephyr'd whispers

[Jack...]

Yep, it just depends on which side of my brain my muse is hanging out at the time. Thanks so much Frieda. Your kindness always sends the storm clouds away.

[Frieda P]

Try to stay on the right side, or left, whichever it might be. ;-)

[Jack...]

100 zephyr'd whispers...holy moly that's beautiful.

[Frieda P]

Only if you behave yourself Brock ;-)

[Sporadic Soul]

I love this part. It's so relaxing. I don't know. I just feel that way. :
"The air is so much thinner here

Miles find my eyes gazing,

valleys wave in gardenia gestures

and foot prints form in seeking patterns"

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. That is the feeling I was trying to present. I am happy you enjoyed this.

[Mark]

The first two lines are clean ... unencumbered. The work gets a little more labored after that. I would love to see write cleanly, I think with your talent you could create something genius level.

[Jack...]

Thanks Mark, I wrote this rather quickly last night...I guess it shows.

[Mark]

I thought so. It's the bane of real talent though, to be able to dash off a poem and have it be good. It often prevents us from making the work great.

[Lily Mae]

For all you've written about love...I hope when this special someone reads your work she remembers to breathe after. Another beauty that first to me to the mountains... (I'm a secret Mt. Woman;) to the wisps of love:) xoxo

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Lily Mae. I hope as well.

[Pryde Foltz]

Always when twilight horizons form in the east

and starlight canopies unfold

my love soars on breathless wishes

from this passion’d mountain top…endlessly to you

Magnificent imagery.

[Jack...]

Thank you Pryde. I am happy you enjoyed this poem today...or yesterday. :)

[s y e]

Oh Jack, this is beautiful! Your imagery, the wording it's all perfect. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

The story you tell in all your poems are magnificent. I loved the title of this one, a beautiful poem from our number one Romantic Poet!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Noodle. I appreciate your kindness and your caring for me.