I could not look away

Inspired by Frieda's "Echoes of your stare" and the magical music that accompanied it...

I could not look away

 

I fell into the nightmares of a lover’s distant past

While the whispers in the darkness brought the spell her heart did cast

As it raked across my feelings and I cried out in the night

Did this smile I was wearing fit a little bit too tight

With her nails now painted crimson like the color of my blood

She could walk on my emotions as the silhouettes did flood

 

This the morning of believing that our time is filled with fate

And I find myself now screaming, please don’t tell me it’s too late

She collected every quarter on the number I did call

For she wanted me to know that I could never have it all

Still I crawled into the darkness with my eyes so open wide

And together we were drowning in the motion of the tide

 

In her eyes was every second of the minutes I could spare

Like a clock that’s steady ticking heartbeat rhythms sent to share

Drinking thirsty from the fountain as her finger it did press

On the chrome implanted wishes of an early moon confess

When I looked off in the distance and her beauty it did play

It delivered an affection and I could not look away

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[s y e]

Jack you're the best. There is no one here who could write the way you do, you write in such a way that all your heart is on the page, the emotions are so real and the imagery is to die for. If WC brings out another badge, it should be for Best Romantic and it'd go to you! I'll make one that says Jackomantic on it, it'll be unique and made with TLC. :-)

Sometimes you cannot look away from love my dear friend, it's there and there's nothing you can do. I adored this. Another Jackpot. ;-)

[Jack...]

Yeah I know you can't, but sometime you would sure like too. Thanks so much my friend.

[s y e]

I don't think you'd ever want to my friend. Chin up Jackomantic. :)

[Jack...]

Why would you say that?

[s y e]

Say what???

[Jack...]

Oh, excuse me, I mis-read what you wrote. Nevermind... :)

[Laura Harrison]

Every line of this piece is perfect. Great job, Jack!

[Jack...]

You are too kind. Thank you so much.

[Shaquana Adams]

This is really good. Trapped in a lovers gaze along with everything that she is. What a wonderful read. Thank for you sharing Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend. I apprciate your kind words.

[Marie]

Sometimes we can't look away from love, no matter how sad or terrifying...

[Jack...]

You can say that again...Thanks Marie

[Pryde Foltz]

Did this smile I was wearing fit a little bit too tight

With her nails now painted crimson like the color of my blood

She could walk on my emotions as the silhouettes did flood

A terrifying type of love but a masterful write.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Pryde. It was dark that morning.

[Sami Khalil]

Confessions of a lover to the moon face although drowning into the motions and emotions of the moment. The screams in the dark nights of the soul when all you need is her by your side. You had to rake the emotions into a pile of silhouettes to be flooded by the rain...Excellent...:).........................

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Sami. I truly appreciate you

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)........................

[kublakhan27]

A fine counterpart to Frieda's piece...very Cohenesque as she pointed out haha Great work as always my friend.

[Frieda P]

Cohenesque, sounds like something you could catch and it's a good thang ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Indeed ;)

[Frieda P]

...ain't no cure for love either ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Isn't that the truth Mrs.R? ;)

[Frieda P]

Hey if HE said it, must be ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha No kidding ;)

[Frieda P]

I think we should start a new religion ;-) haha

[kublakhan27]

Haha Nah whatever we'd start, he probably already came up with ;P

[Frieda P]

hallelujah ;-)

[Jack...]

Thank you Steve.

[Frieda P]

God Jack, this invokes all kinds of darkly impassioned emotions, I can't pick a single line, it's ALL wicked grand! Wow, who knew those few lines would inspire such genius and beauty. It's Cohen I tell ya...Love it!

100 thirsty eyes

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my sweet inspiration