Hyperventilating

Inspired by my sweet poet friend Frieda. Thanks for the wonderful words and photo...

 

Hyperventilating

 

Zephyrs breach this cobble wall

Gusts of morning glory breezes

Swirl enchanting echoes about my weary mind

I reach for the top, pulling myself to my feet

So that I may see that which is calling

In gale force phrases of poetic vistas…finding me

 

“Hallucinating?”

 

Breathless, I lean on moss covered stone

Weakened by mystic dreams and sighed fragrance,

For the beauty which engulfs my sight

Of lavender reaches in ribbon’d flow,

Brush strokes of cocoa eyes smiling

Grasps my body, wrapping me in passion’d bliss…touching me

 

“Hypnotically”

 

“What magic is this?” I call out from the shadows

In wheezing voice of broken harmony

“Tis love,’ she whispers as my breath escapes

Clutching my chest in fevered emotions

Wide eyed dimensions course my now beaming face

As all of life has bloomed within my being…and I fall

 

“Hyperventilating”

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

What it feels like to fall in love.

Reviews

[Cassie]

waowww!!!! you two are great. This is so good collaboration. I loved loved loved. Let me guess who wrote which stanza, Frieda the first stanza, Jack the last stanza...about the second stanza, It seems to be Jacks also frieda's. I hope my guess is right

[Jack...]

Sorry my friend, I wrote the entire piece.. It was inspired by a conversation Frieda and I had. But I do appreciate you Sunshine.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and it does take our breath away doesn't it?

again, excellent portrayal of what it feels like to love, to fall in love...to express those feelings...

you have the knack, my friend...

okay, i am catching my breath now.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Jacob

[Kellyrose]

I loved reading this for the second time; you have captured falling in love beautifully

[Jack...]

Kelly, I always am thrilled when you visit my world. Thanks so much.

[Diana]

Sounds like a suitable tribute to Frieda. "Zephyrs, gusts, swirls..." Sounds like the sort of language she would use in her poetry.

[Jack...]

Thanks Diana.

[joshua sky]

Indeed. Beautiful and ardent diction presenting a picture of the most powerful force in the universe. Well done. :)

[Jack...]

Thank you Joshua...happy you enjoyed this.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Beautiful and just gorgeous. Wonderfully penned. Thanks for sharing.

[Jack...]

Thank you Gleb. Your kindness is always appreciated.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yeah, apt description of everything I would much rather avoid, thanks. :)

[Jack...]

Oh come on now...thanks for visiting though.

[Lyn Anderson]

Sorry, think my fangs and claws were showing there. Oops.

[Pryde Foltz]

Wide eyed dimensions course my now beaming face
As all of life has bloomed within my being…and I fall

“Hyperventilating”

Wow …. really great write, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you Pryde. You are too kind to me

[Pryde Foltz]

You make it easy … you and your words are most deserving:)

[Marie]

Joveky, tantalizing imagry. It doesn't rhyme, but if feels like a rhyming poem...very skillfully dne...

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Marie.

[Sami Khalil]

She is an inspiration in her own rite and you are too Jack to so many. I like the way you start with the thought and then you define its aspects along with your feelings. This is breathless escapes to love...Splendid...:)....................

[Jack...]

Thank you Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You re welcome muchly...:)..................