Spider web tears

 

 

 

My tears to a spider web cling

 

Captured sorrow

teetering on patterend thoughts

and anguished pleas

 

Free in the wind and sunlight glare

 

Until falling,

finding the earth barren and parched,

absorbed until they mean

 

nothing

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Talesha]

Sadness,a sentiment I wish did not exist.You execute it beautifully in this poem.Well done. Also,admist the tears,I hope you find some time to smile :)

[Jack...]

Thank you Talesha...happily I do find much time to smile, especially with reviews like you have left me today.

[Talesha]

Aww I'm glad :)

[Shaun Payton]

Melancholy comes to mind. Captures ones own sorrow. Fine work.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Shaun.

[Shaun Payton]

You are most welcome Jack

[David Scott]

I felt the sorrow here Jack...
I think your poem dhows the emotion very well.

As a point of philosophy, I would add this thought to the end of your poem, "and everything".

[Jack...]

Thanks David, I will certainly consider that.

[David Scott]

I do not mean you should change the poem. It would change the meaning and feel upside down... Still, food for thought how one more little thought can change the state of mind.

[Jack...]

Well I don't normally do this but check out "Said the shadow to the tree" I have been told that is very philosophical, whatever the hell that means. :) Thanks again my friend.

[m.s.early]

The "nothing" as the last line captures the sadness the poem induced. Reminiscent of late night grieving, how thoughts get stuck and prevent sleep until it's too late. Too many morning I watched the Sun rise over some needless heartbreak or anxiety only to have them dissolve as time passed.

I am hesitant to describe such sadness as lovely, but the words certainly are.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Xavier.

[Marie]

Tears that cling to a spider web...sad, delicate, lovely image...

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Marie.

[SyberRose]

Captured sorrow
teetering on patterend thoughts
and anguished pleas


A sad one but nicely said Jack...enjoyed the photo too...Rose:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Rose. So nice to see you again.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Such endearing words from a poet I've come to expect it from! It just reads beautifully, Jack!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Kelly. It is so nice to see you again.

[s y e]

Oh wow, see, I hate those creepy things so I was a little squeamish about reading this write but then you go and blow me away. Only you could write something as beautiful as this.

[Jack...]

Thank you Noodle. How I appreciate your sweet words.

[s y e]

No bother.

[Frieda P]

Sheesh Jack, you're killing me here with all this sad stuff. Spider web tears, only you could think of that!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my sweet friend. Oh damn, you mean I didn't mention they were tears of joy...go figure. :)

[Frieda P]

Yeah yeah, spiders always make me think of joyful things. ;-)

[Jack...]

Eight legs to hold you with my dear.

[Frieda P]

Eww fookin creepy Jack.......... ;-P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A sad but lovely metaphor which expresses these emotions so clearly Jack

[Jack...]

Thanks John. Just something that came to me this afternoon.