Concrete Peaches - A collaboration - Frieda and Jack

 

 

 

 

Concrete peaches

 

Endless seams of knotted hopes

Collecting ‘neath orchard dreams

Rows of fruited illusions bloom

In aromatic cadence, even in winter’s silence

 

Leafless branches tease misty skies

producing unrealistic temptations,

easily within reach of desperate fingers

willing to harvest heartaches by the bushel

 

Trudging through fields of broken promises

knee deep in splintered divisions of trust

devotion doesn't grow on trees

it needs to be carefully nurtured

 

Shedding layers of old decaying bark

reaching for the sunlight in the dark

acceptance olive branches under cover

twisted roots have sapped their luster

 

and all that remains are concrete peaches

weighted words of fuzzy meanings

shallow breaths on succulent breezes,

free-stone mutterings of faded descent

 

 

Author's Note

A collaboration with my good friend Frieda.

Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[Cassie]

Wow!!!!! You two great friends of mine collaborate so well, you should make sure you collaborate as often as you can, This is a good job my dear friend. Am looking forward to more of your collaborations this coming year, PLEASE DO NOT CLOSE YOUR ACCOUNT because I will feel very sad....
on to the poem, I loved it all and the third stanza has a great lesson in it. Good job and HAPPY 2014....hugsss

[Jack...]

Good morning Sunshine, thank you always for your sweet words and your beautiful smile. Frieda is an amazing poet and I am so thankful (lucky) that I get to write with her.

[Frieda P]

Wow you're too kind Cassie, thanks so much....Happy New Year to you and yours.

[s y e]

You both always wrote so beautifully together. You both get better with each poem you both write and I can never tell where one begins and one ends.

The imagery is fantastic - You both paint a beautiful picture!

[Jack...]

Noodle, my sweet friend, thank you so much. You are always so kind and your smile in our world just makes it so much brighter. It is easy to paint a beautiful picture when working with a beautiful poet.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A dalliance with the great lady and wham bang you two produce a fitting offspring of delicate ethereal metaphors with deep pathos sunk within.

[Jack...]

Huh?????? :) Thanks John. Frieda makes it easy, she truly does inspire me.

[Frieda P]

Ha, I'm feeling labor pains after that one.......thanks John!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Is that something to celebrate on labour day?

[Frieda P]

There's no 'u' in labor John, you guys have all the luck lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

There is in Limey land my Lady!

[Jack...]

Maybe we should have written about concrete limes?

[Frieda P]

Next time Jack..ha besides Limey sounds like a disease lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That is your next pillow talk with the Lady of poetry perhaps Jack!

[Jack...]

John, "perhaps" is always one of my favorite words.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yeah it has an air of maybe, maybe not to it!

[icelandicblue]

I cannot tell where one begins and another ends...a perfect collaboration.

[Jack...]

Thanks Anne. Happy you stopped by and enjoyed this one. I know I enjoyed writing it.

[Pryde Foltz]

A seamless work. It shows how much the two of your inspire each other. Skill and love.

[Jack...]

Thank you Pryde for your kindness. Frieda always seems to bring out the best in me.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Aw! The imagery is fantastic, as usual, and the theme very interesting. Wonderful work, once again!

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Gleb. Frieda is a dream to work with.

[Rachelle]

I am suddenly wonderIng how fermented peaches would taste like.... but pregnant women have strange cravings....

[Jack...]

That is funny...glad this one made you think. :) Thank you so much for stopping by the orchard today.

[Baby Ricochet]

Upon reading the title I thought "Jesus, If I park my truck under a concrete peach tree those Goddamn peaches are gonna dent my hood when they fall."

[Jack...]

Hey my friend, no worries, I run a body shop here in Texas. Just call me when that happens and I will fix you up. Thanks so much BR.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

This is the most well-blended collaboration I've ever read. The two of you combined your words and thoughts flawlessly. My pen hand bows to you both!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. It is always a thrill for me when I get to work with frieda. She amazes me at every turn.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I share your sentiment... she is at the forefront of the elite writers here. Anyone who thinks otherwise obviously does not read her work.

[Dr. Wood ?]

well u r both far too clever for ME, I TRY to understand but it sometimes goes way over my shiny head...Fine words tho'

[Jack...]

Thanks Doc. I aprreciate you stopping by.