Concrete Peaches - A collaboration - Frieda and Jack

 

 

 

 

Concrete peaches

 

Endless seams of knotted hopes

Collecting ‘neath orchard dreams

Rows of fruited illusions bloom

In aromatic cadence, even in winter’s silence

 

Leafless branches tease misty skies

producing unrealistic temptations,

easily within reach of desperate fingers

willing to harvest heartaches by the bushel

 

Trudging through fields of broken promises

knee deep in splintered divisions of trust

devotion doesn't grow on trees

it needs to be carefully nurtured

 

Shedding layers of old decaying bark

reaching for the sunlight in the dark

acceptance olive branches under cover

twisted roots have sapped their luster

 

and all that remains are concrete peaches

weighted words of fuzzy meanings

shallow breaths on succulent breezes,

free-stone mutterings of faded descent

 

 

Author's Note

A collaboration with my good friend Frieda.

Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[BlackRose]

LOOOVED this piece. You both wrote this... couldn't have been a better collaboration. Sweet juices off the tongue, phenomenal. Like a Van Gough, a worthy masterpiece.

[Frieda P]

Wow BlackRose, thanks so much, so thrilled you enjoy'd this one...Van Gogh, wooo now I'm swooning wait till Jack reads this.................

[BlackRose]

And not just speaking on only this, but on any of both yours works too And my pleasure reading. Your very very welcome. :o)

[Frieda P]

Jack really is a pleasure to work with and so talented, thanks again, muchly appreciated.

[BlackRose]

Oh yes, that he is. And as you are much in the same, and don't forget it or sell yourself short. Anytime my friend, anytime.

[Jack...]

You know, Blackrose, it is easy to create a masterpiece when you are writing with a masterpiece and Frieda is that and so much more. Thank you so very much for your wonderful review of our work. I am the fortunate one who gets to sit in the studio and learn from the master. I love Van Gough, but to me, Frieda is my Monet of words and I am just the framemaker.

[BlackRose]

It's like when someonw says I feel the love in this room or here. What else can I say but that bring a happy tear to my eye what you said all here about Frieda. Now that's a sincere, lovable, oh so SWEETperson and that I'm honored to know as well. I can only image what she would say to this. :'o]

[Frieda P]

Jack's too kind, don't listen to him, I've learned a lot from reading his poetry since I've been on the cafe, he always underestimates his talents...that's more than one, he plays/composes music and does stand up too ;-) Mwah!

[BlackRose]

He seems like a great person for as little as I have known here. No one should sell themselves short if ever the case. When I read such exquisite works of art like this I let them know for sure. I learned a lot from him too along with few number of others. When I read ones like these, it's as if I know what level I need to strive for or should be at when writing certain ones. And it's true and understandable at times that one can feel that way but at the same time without really underestimating their ownselves as a writer. And that awesome that he does all that too. Funny, who would have thought. More of a mushy gushy, all around great more so romantice type of guy I thought and still think so. ;o) Mwah!

[Frieda P]

Ha you nailed it, he's the sensitive, consummate romance writer with a funny bone, and talented musician to boot....we all aspire to be better, I read certain poets here and sigh, why can't I write like that...it's a good thing, we all learn something new along the way. ;-) x

[BlackRose]

But to me all in all it's fun, LOVE to write and the fact I can progress or get better as I write depending. =o)

[Frieda P]

Way fun and a helluva lot cheaper than therapy. ;-)

[BlackRose]

HAHA, you bet it is. But this IS good therapy. ;o)

[MsJewel]

Collaborations can be tricky, but you and Frieda weave your words together so beautifully it is impossible to tell the poem was written by two poets.

I love the entire poem, but the last verse is my favorite

and all that remains are concrete peaches
weighted words of fuzzy meanings
shallow breaths on succulent breezes,
free-stone mutterings of faded descent

Do either of you know how good you are??? This is absolutely brilliant!

:) Julie

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Julie. I know how good Frieda is. :)

[MsJewel]

Frieda is amazing and so are you!

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

This is very nice and the collaboration of two poets is dear here. I love this write and the detail inside it. Truly, a sweet poem with depth and clear thinking involved in the writing of it.
Your partnership in this is talented and makes it shine.
Keep writing these lovely poems with deep meaning and emotions.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Josie. I love writing with other writers, it truly does help elevate my thinking and my visions. Frieda is an amazing poet to write with and I am honored she has chosen to write this one with me.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

That is wonderful that you and her can work so well together.

[Will Neill]

Jack,Frieda I have been sitting on the side lines watching and reading with great enjoyment of both your poems and Frieda's plus your recent colaboration. I think that those who cannot produce good poetry only try to put down those who can. We khow who we are talking about. Good work, great talent, and good people. have a great new year to both of you.
Will

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Will. I really appreciate you saying what you said and appreciate your time. I hope you have a wonderful new year my friend.

[Frieda P]

Dear Will, thanks for your support and this glowing review. I had hoped not too many people saw 'his' insensitive tirade, especially since it was on Jack's profile. Much appreciate your kind words. Have a great New Year!

[:o]

This is a masterpiece. You are both extraordinary poets for being able to seamlessly interweave your own poetic lines as though it were written by one person.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words and welcome to WC. I appreciate you stopping by today and reading our poem. If you get a chance, check out some of Frieda's work. She is truly an amazing poet.

[:o]

I plan to right away. You're welcome Sir.

[Rita L. Sev]

I am so happy to be reading a Frieda and Jack collaboration - the images in this piece are so unique and thoughtful. So much power in this metaphor... truly an amazing poem on all counts!

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Rita. Frieda is an amazing poet and truly makes this kind of thing so very easy and fun. I appreciate your kind words always.

[Frieda P]

So kind of you to say Rita, jazzed you enjoyed!

[Latifa]

stunning Jack I loved every single line

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Latifa, but it was a collaboration with Frieda. She adds the beauty to the piece.

[SyberRose]

a wonderful collaboration Jack and Frieda...just like old times ha...nicely done as always...Rose:)
Happy New Year to you both...hugs

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much sweet Rose. Happy you stopped by and enjoyed this fun poetic venture. It is so very nice to see you again. Happy New Year to you too my friend.

[Frieda P]

Happy New Year and thanks muchly Rose. :-)

[Lydia Shutter]

Frieda and Jack, your words blend so perfectly, I can not even guess who wrote which lines. The meaning is lush and filled with rich emotion. Lots of regrets in this write of “weighted words of fuzzy meanings.” When the new year approaches, we weigh the events of the previous year, think through the unrealistic expectations we created for ourselves. Why do we set the bar so high? We have to erase the slate though (Shedding layers of old decaying bark” to move onward and upward. The future awaits....and I hope that future holds many more collaborations between the two of you. Wonderful work. Lydi**

[Jack...]

Lydi, everytime your smile reaches into my world I find it to be very contagious, perhaps that is because of the beauty to comes along with it. Thank you so much for your wonderful review of our work. To me, it is always a dream come true when I have the opportunity to write with Frieda, she is such a fantastic poet and I could not be a luckier fellow when this happens. Thanks again my sweet friend and Happy New Year to you.

[Lydia Shutter]

and thank YOU for the compliment, Jack! :)

[Frieda P]

What a great review, thanks Lydi, Jack came up with the title and we ran with it, jazzed you enjoyed!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A gripping collaboration, learned and poided in equal measure, well done you two, great read.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Thomas. I appreciate you stopping by and leaving such kind words about our poem. It is just proof that dreams do come true.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Thomas.