Burned out dreams

 

 

 

 

Burned out dreams

 

Lights strung above this out of place darkness

create shadows of an invisible existence

Filaments of glowing hopes and wants

droop towards empty heart beats

 

Alone in this overcrowded nightmare,

checking the time on faceless clocks

in no particular sequence standing

like sentries on broken boundary lines

 

An endless runway of lifeless orbs

dot the landscape in Morse code warnings

as I turn away in a curved defiance,

unable to accept the words touching my eyes

 

And still, glistening raindrops fall from overhead wires

reflecting each tear drop of prism’d descent

For even if I wake, screaming as the light disappears

she will still be gone, like every other burned out dream  

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Captcha - naught (it figures)

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

Alone in this overcrowded nightmare,

checking the time on faceless clocks

in no particular sequence standing

like sentries on broken boundary lines



great abstract ! keep up the good work !
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[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[s y e]

Loneliness. I know this feeling all too well. A tough read for me but good job.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my sweet friend.

[icelandicblue]

You've captured the loneliness so many of us feel. It's poignant and it the reader can feel the hollow that sits in the middle.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Anne for your kind words.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

This is such a solemn piece, strung across the heartwires for detection. The hopeless remembrances haunt between the lines. Beautiful!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Linda. I am thrilled you enjoyed this.

[Pryde Foltz]

And still, glistening raindrops fall from overhead wires
reflecting each tear drop of prism’d descent
For even if I wake, screaming as the light disappears
she will still be gone, like every other burned out dream

A very powerful and stirring write.

Captcha strikes again.

[Jack...]

Pryde, I am smiling because of your kind words. Thank you so much.

[Frieda P]

This yanks at the heart strings and continues to tug throughout. You nail the emotion perfectly each and every time Jack, another amazing write from your pen my friend.

[Jack...]

Frieda, loneliness reached out and taunted me as I wrote this. I am thrilled it came through in my writing. Thank you so much.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

An age old tale really, one that reeks vengeance and sorrow in us all! Well done, good read.

[Jack...]

Thanks Thomas...happy you stopped by.

[Troy Henson]

Hope and dreams. Wanting whats just out of reach. Nicely done Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Troy.

[Cody Williams]

A very good piece you got here Jack! Thanks for sharing it!

-CW

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Cody. I appreciate you stopping by.

[Cody Williams]

No problem at all!