A Broken Man

 

 

 

 

A broken man

 

Shredded letters on the floor

Empty whiskey bottles

Eviction notice on the door

Cruising at full throttle

 

Not a penny to his name

Longing the impending

No one but himself to blame

Misery unending

 

This is but a broken man

Pieces crushed and shattered

Love hath left him once again

Upon the wind now scattered

 

Vices form his prison walls

Slowly closing in

Death to be his last reward

He begs it to begin

 

Reviews

[Zahra]

This is but a broken man Pieces crushed and shattered Love hath left him once again Upon the wind now scattere

The sadness in this feels so close to my heart, truly profound. Very nice.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Zahra, so nice to see you again.

[Sami Khalil]

"Not a penny to his name"
You are rich in our love and admiration for you Jack . Your readers don't care about those things...:)...............

[Jack...]

Thanks Sami...that means the world to me.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)................................

[Cryingkate]

Perfect Reflection..
i have seen this a few times. I know what a broken man looks like.
And think you did a perfect job with the word painting.
Maybe even too good.....

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Connie for your kind words.

[Cryingkate]

I am so happy Happy that Sami found this and left you a Hug by way of words.
What you painted hit home for me, for honestly my spirit has felt broken. I have been a pillar for son many in the last three years and now my cup is empty and trouble knocks on my door, If I don't find the strength in me in the next two three weeks I could loose my home.
I am a survivalist, I also find the way to use it for others, but this time I need it for me and those who still depend on me. I couldn't leave you a hug or kind words because you did your job so well and threw me a reminder notice that I must fight . I must find that last bit of strength.
Through your brokenness shared, you have helped me to begin picking up my shattered pieces.
Jack, You are always welcomed to unroll a bed to lay your head with us.
No matter whether it be in a park or on this humble 5 acres.
Action must be followed by words or else they be in vain.
I love the word too much to disgrace it.
It is an honor to have met you here.
Because of your words, that fed me, I might be able to fight thru this and win this battle and keep this place after all.
I thank you in advance
Thank you for giving me a home
By your word you have provided a home and it's your now too.
Sincerely, Your fellow Soldier of the pen.

[Jack...]

Your comments Connie are one of the biggest hugs I could ever receive. I am humbled by your words and thrilled to no end that my simple poem has ignited a fire in you, allowing you to stand and face what may be coming down the path. We all have strengths within us that will surface when we truly need them, sometimes we just need a little push and the fact that my poem seems to have provided that push has me smiling from ear to ear. Thank you so very much for this bright spot in my day.

[Cryingkate]

I thank You with all my heart and soul..........And know this too,, that not only your words of heart strike mine your poem is the top of the line.
I find that the only poems and writes that are truly well written can only come from the depths of ones soul or mind. Obviously yours is :-) tears.........

[Baby Ricochet]

Pretty intense poem flawlessly delivered. Great work Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[Holly Mason]

.....wish you would continue this...
love words that spark the mind and these do
xoxoxoxo thank you for sharing (share more) Holly

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. I have felt a bit broken as of late...hard to collect thoughts...I will keep trying.

[Holly Mason]

I will hold the collection plate...even if it burns my fingers*)

[Vidya Bacchus]

your words are filled with emotion and lovely to read.Thank you for penning and sharing such a great piece of writing:)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. Happy you enjoyed this.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are most welcome:)

[Laura Harrison]

You did a wonderful job of expressing the emotions and frailty in this poem. Added to my favourites :)

[Jack...]

Thank you my friend. Sorry for the late response, haven't been around in a while.

[Sami Khalil]

"This is but a broken man

Pieces crushed and shattered

Love hath left him once again

Upon the wind now scattered"

[Jack...]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

Most welcome...:)...................

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The structure of this poem feels broken, reflecting the pathos of the piece. Nicely penned Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much John. Happy you stopped by.

[Jack...]

Such a sad beauty here, Jack, but lovely, the love you feel for the person, is great, and should be spoken, I think your words, dance here, they are a soften reassurance though... there is pain, but beauty too...


I hope you feel soon better in mood dear friend,
You make just beautiful art out of it... keep writing always.

- Elisa

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my sweet friend. I always appreciate the smile that finds my face when you visit.

I'm happy if you are my friend... :) you write beautifully.