Lost

Losing someone close is losing everything

Lost

 

Lost without direction

Empty as that crumbled pack of Marlboro lights on the ground

Lonely, a single towel on the line to dry…in the rain

Wasted like left over pudding in the sink strainer

Shredded, an unimportant document in the wrong stack

Destroyed in a crumbled mass of quivering stone

Crying beneath a flowing river rising

Torn apart, a ticket stub to a missed concert

Scared half to death with the other half waiting

Cowering within each breath I no longer want to take

Fractured like grandma’s Hummel found by a wagging dog’s tail

Dead, wearing a disguise of the living…and a poor one at that

Desperate to know that which I won’t

Lost without you

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Loss, particularly when it's unexpected can really do a number on you. Good poem Jack

[Baby Ricochet]

Love the Marlboro lights line

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[Angel]

A single towel on the line to dry...in the rain

So lonely...
So alone..
Oh, how well I know what that feels like.

Sitting alone, late at night, watching the headlights...headlights that won't be turning into the drive...
My heart is with you, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank so much my sweet friend.

[Diana]

"Lost without direction
Empty as that crumbled pack of Marlboro lights on the ground"- Too many things crumble that easily. An adept metaphor.

Hoping you find your way.

[Jack...]

Thank you Diana. I appreciate you always.

[Dr. Wood ?]

you get the message across in SPADES my friend, very touching indeed

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[s y e]

Oh Jack, it is painful when you lose someone close to you. I hope everything is okay Jack......?

[Jack...]

My sweet friend. Thank you for your concern and your kind words.

[Dhaye]

So moving. Indeed, when you lost the closest person to you, it's like you lost everything. But time can heal, Jack. And I know the voice here in the poem can move on.

Nice use of metaphor and simile. Great!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Sweet Dhaye. I always smile when you visit.

[J Todd Underhill]

Wow my poetic brother you rocked it on this one good to see one during my work day from such a great spoken word artist and writer!

[Jack...]

Hey there my friend. Thanks so much for stopping by today and leaving such kind words for me. It feels good when a talented poet like yourself swings by to read.

[Lydia Shutter]

"Scared half to death with the other half waiting" such emotional impact in this line alone, Jack. I could see the crumpled ciggy pack on the ground and feel the pieces of a broken statue beneath my feet. When someone you love is not around and you have no contact with her/him, life can be difficult to face. Like the peanut butter without the jelly....something is missing and life doesn't "taste" right. You really expressed yourself with this one, Jack. Great work. Lydi**

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Lydi.