But if you try sometimes...

Written with a little help from The Rolling Stones song - "You can't always get what you want"

 

 

 

 

But if you try sometimes...

 

 

“I saw her today at the reception”

 

My eyes filled with changing emotions

In satin gown and fire brand hair

A china doll beyond the display case

Happiness was breathing the air

 

“In her glass was a bleeding man”

A shadow of someone on the platform

I could see his face wracked in pain

Scars of here and prior altercations

Acid falling in the guise of rain

 

“She was practiced at the art of deception”

Behind that sequined mask she stood hiding

A smile painted in pastel red

Pretending a friendship is more than just golden

Wishing the other were endlessly dead

 

“Well I could tell by her blood-stained hands”

 

Pointing fingers dripping in excess waste

Smearing the drapes of lipstick tapestry

Planting the seed of doubt deep within

Smirking as she said these words to me

 

“You can’t always get what you want”

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Diana]

Not a healing sort of poem... Dark. No, you cannot always get what you want. An interesting twist in the road for you, Jack...

[Jack...]

Thanks Diana...yep, you never know what you get from me.

[TL Boehm]

A shadow of someone on the platform
I could see his face wracked in pain
Scars of here and prior altercations
Acid falling in the guise of rain

WOW. Stellar write. The words themselves sting as they are read. Well done.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Tammy.

[Sami Khalil]

This has a sad resignation to it Jack and blood-stained hands like you say. Within your changing emotions you are trying to make sense of it all within the turmoil going on ...I like too the : " A smile painted in pastel red." Another great write...:)................

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Sami. I appreciate you stopping by.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..............

[Robbie~xoxo~]

NICE!! This is dark stuff Jack... Something different from you...me likes it! ;D

Halloween is definitely on it's way... a Thrilling read!~xoxo~

P.S. Love the end, ties well with the Rolling Stones song. :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Robbie.

[Dr. Wood ?]

clever stuff Jack...Even grizzly old Keith Richards would love this..there are some around that still do not know the difference between Want..and NEED

[Jack...]

Thanks Doc...I appreciate it.

[MsJewel]

"You can't always get what you want" - so true my friend.

You have woven such a wonderful little thriller here Jack to a classic song. Your creativity shines. This is brilliant!

:) Julie

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Julie. Glad you liked this one.

[icelandicblue]

Holy crap Jack that was eerily good. I could see it playing out like a Hitchcock movie. There is a fine line we balance on between want and need but when the wants are sinister all bets are off!

[Jack...]

You can say that again my friend. Thanks so very much. I always enjoy hearing your thoughts on my poetry.

[Emerald Seas]

In her glass was a bleeding man.

Love that line! Wow... This guy is in trouble and she appears to be a miserable bi#%¥
Sounds like someone had a chance to do some people watching and enjoyed the creative spark that the opportunity offered up :)
Great write, my friend!

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much my sweet friend. You just never know if you don't try...

[kublakhan27]

As you may guess, the title attracted me right away, but it's the poem that made my jaw drop. You've given me a totally fresh outlook on the song with some phenomenal imagery, like happiness in the air, and acid falling in the guise of rain. Great work Jack :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. Just my interpretation of the song lyrics.

[Rita L. Sev]

You have added a chilling element to the Stones lyrics, Jack - the implied, "But if you try sometimes, you get what you need" is seriously in question here - this poor guy is S.O.L. I fear... :) Really great images here!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Rita. This was a fun one to write