But if you try sometimes...

Written with a little help from The Rolling Stones song - "You can't always get what you want"

 

 

 

 

But if you try sometimes...

 

 

“I saw her today at the reception”

 

My eyes filled with changing emotions

In satin gown and fire brand hair

A china doll beyond the display case

Happiness was breathing the air

 

“In her glass was a bleeding man”

A shadow of someone on the platform

I could see his face wracked in pain

Scars of here and prior altercations

Acid falling in the guise of rain

 

“She was practiced at the art of deception”

Behind that sequined mask she stood hiding

A smile painted in pastel red

Pretending a friendship is more than just golden

Wishing the other were endlessly dead

 

“Well I could tell by her blood-stained hands”

 

Pointing fingers dripping in excess waste

Smearing the drapes of lipstick tapestry

Planting the seed of doubt deep within

Smirking as she said these words to me

 

“You can’t always get what you want”

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

As always, you have mastered the art of poetry eloquence. And getting ideas from a song is impressive, you know. Well-penned again. :)

[Justsimplyjulia]

ummmm don't mean to sound naive but I sort of kind of have no idea what song this poem is referring to. I wasn't born in the Rolling stones era (I think.....) so all I really know is bad country and pop.... you know, One Direction and Taylor Swift.... But it was a great write jack!
-Dragon :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. You are correct, it is the Rolling Stones, but that is okay if you are not familiar, I still appreciate your kind words to me. Maybe I should write one to a Taylor Swift song. :)

[Justsimplyjulia]

Ooh spare my eyes! I cannot stand Taylor Swifts new stuff. it is a disgrace to country. whatever happened to the classics like Don Williams and George Strait? hahaha but it would be an interesting write if you do so choose to write about one of her songs...

[Jack...]

George Strait won entertainer of the year last night on the CMAs. He lives here in my city. I used to go see him play when no one knew who he was.

[Justsimplyjulia]

Holy cow! THAT IS AMAZING! oh my word I am so jealous.... you are a lucky man Jack....
-Dragon

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice rewrite of the stones Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[redflutterby]

"Fire brand hair"eh? Sounds like a redhead. Anyway the poem is a great play off the song. But unfortunately the Stones may have been deluded...quite often we don't get what we want or need. Guess there's no way to sue them for false advertising...right?

[Jack...]

Fire brand hair...nice huh? No I guess we can't sue them, but I can thank them for the inspiration that brought you to my page today. Thanks so much Red. I appreciate you stopping by and visiting again.

[NeiL ArandA]

" You can't always get what you want " a song by Rolling Stones . Reminds me of this beautifully crafted piece

[Jack...]

Neil, I used the lyrics from that song as my inspiration for this poem. Like I said before, inspiration for me is everywhere.

[Cassie]

I couldn't say more, you cant always get what you want. Thank you for sharing this my dear friend Jack. I hope you have been well.

[Jack...]

I have been fine but I am much better now that I get to see your smile on my page. Thank you so very much Sunshine.

[Ruth]

God, this is powerful Jack and a classic song to interact with :) Infusion of the highest coolness here love, a fav xx

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much my sweet friend.

[Angel]

OH!!! MY!!! GAWD!!!!!!
This is off the charts, my friend! This is fab-u-tastic!!!!

I wonder what the Rolling Stones would think of this piece??

Keith??? Mr. Richards???? What do you say????????????????

[Jack...]

Thanks so much sweet Angel. Always I am happy when you stop by.

[SarahLin]

Outstanding drew me in right away..

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Sarahlin. Happy you stopped by and enjoyed this one.