Final Memory

 

 

 

 

 

When

death on darkened skies

through my window

flies

 

My

wish in pleading sighs

is that before my

eyes

 

Your

face is what I see

of this last breath I

breathe

 

So

nothing else shall be

my final

memory

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Lovely, Jack. But don't think about dying so soon, okay? I'd love to read more of your poems. ;)

[Lily Finch]

OH ..... it's so heart touching... love it

[Jack...]

Thank you so much sweet Lily

[Baby Ricochet]

Now that's really beautiful

[Jack...]

Thanks BR always

[NeiL ArandA]

It is melancholy sad but look. This one is shelved in 5 libraries. This piece could be so priceless that some reviewers saved it in 5 different places. This is a very nostalgic piece Jack and the picture is perfect, complimenting your piece.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Neil. It would be nice if all of us were lucky enough to have that one special person be the last thing we see before we pass on to the next adventure.

[Cassie]

somehow Sad, the thought of death, losing loved ones makes me so sad. Your poems my dear king of romance can take you to a very good place or to a very sad place, I like the way you capture your readers emotions and you got me in this one. As usual I enjoyed it

[Jack...]

Always I am thrilled when you come to visit my friend. Thank you so truly for your kind words to me.

[kublakhan27]

I am a sensitive person to put it lightly, and this piece nearly had me in tears, perhaps because I've lost a slew of relatives in the past decade, many due to illnesses beyond their control, including my Dad last year. It feels like it never ends, and I am all-too-aware of my own mortality as a result. But I don't wish to overwhelm this review with my own life story and bring you down when I'm really trying to praise you and your poetic gift. This is still an undeniably beautiful piece, and in spite of the aforementioned events, I took a sense of hope and optimism from it. I am not a preacher, but I don't believe in the notion of a permanent goodbye, only unwanted hiatuses from loved ones while we await our turn to reunite. A truly poignant piece my friend. You've said so much with so little here.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. It doesn't end, there will always be new beginnings to meet our waiting eyes. But even a moment away from someone we love is too much for me and that is the face I would like to see before I make the next turn. I always appreciate your comments and please, feel free to say whatever you like on my page.

[kublakhan27]

Amen to that my friend.

[Ruth]

Ah, nice...yeah, let that final vision be one to WANT to remember :) x

[Jack...]

We can dream my friend. Thank you so much.

[Ruth]

Dreams are paramount ;) lol x

[Pax]

ahh... this is so amusing... the heartfelt stroke of your pen is felt throughout each stanza...its simply beautiful!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Pax.

[Angel]

This piece made me go
"OH!"
It is just too beautiful, Jack!

[Jack...]

Thanks my sweet Angel.