Your man

 

 

 

Your man

 

O’ fallen leaf of barren branch

doth charge my heart, my aching heart

with missing you, needing you

On sun dried earth I lay,

grasping at my dreams, so desperate,

find that in this depth

felled by wind of colder days,

my life doth need your touch

so very much it calls to thee,

come to me, cover me

shower me with hope…

so far you stand

~

I feel as if I am a tiny creature,

an ant on the pavement

with cracks and crevice deep

Foundling for the distance far,

searching of a path to reap

to thy heart, thy arms

O’ breath of love I beg thee home,

to lie with you this eve,

this winters eve

of far off arches and grayish glare

~

My travels take me long away

Places I am lost to stay

find this boy a’ crying

tears of love for thee, tears of despair

Crying, weeping, hoping, begging,

come to me,

come to me my love, my dream

into my open arms…waiting

~

The day might fill the emptiness

with broken branches barren so

dare I say I have the right

to honor love from you,

hold it so within my heart aching

My needs are many,

the truth has shown

for languished features painted hard,

hard against my weathered skin, rough, broken

I scream, my voice still faint of tone,

louder as is nothing less

sorted by the evening breeze

blowing strong against the fence

~

I desire thee to touch me,

kiss me, hold me, take me

The flames of passion brightly burn

igniting but this love I hold

So cherished is your heart

I feel it pounding, pulsing

within mine own chest

My quest is you and only you,

design me, I am yours,

make me as you would,

carve me, bend me, mould me

sculpt me to be,

your man

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Go easy on me, this was an experiment

Reviews

[SarahLin]

Oh Jack, I loved this one so much. I would say that the 'experiment' was a success.

[Jack...]

Thanks you Sarahlin, so very much for your kind words to me. I truly appreciate your friendship.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

I enjoyed reading this one..Very creative and unique work..Thanks for your visits to my page..Your comments were encouraging..Sara

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Sara. Please let me know whe you post new work.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Jack,

I will probably post a new one tonight..

It is an honor to be able to read all the talented people on here..

Sara

[Jack...]

You are included in that list as well my friend.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Thanks..Sara

[iliOZ]

an experiment is a procedure to verify the outcome of a hypothesis.
the outcome is predictable and in front of us ladies and gentlemen ... i'd say we don't know jack!
thanks, it is brittle and soft simultaneously.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much for visiting my laboratory today. I appreciate it.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Oooo...a "classically" styled piece. I like the way that you experiment, and this one did have a good feel and flow to it. Loved the imagery and the tempo...some of the language made me trip a little bit in the reading, but then again, I always had trouble with this "old english" form, even in school ;)

sculpt me to be,
your man -- *sigh*, if only all men thought this way, my friend...or at least if I could find one who thought this way!

[Jack...]

If you truly want to be someone's everything then you have to sacrifice I think. The good thing is, if you are even in the ballpark of being their everything, then there shouldn't be too much that needs to be changed. :) Thank you so much my friend. So nice of you to visit.

[Pryde Foltz]

carve me, bend me, mould me
sculpt me to be,
your man

Loving someone so deeply that you would all them to metaphorically murder you. Unfortunately, I understand this sentiment. Another amazing write, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Pryde. Some would do anything for the one they love and if they are lucky, they are exactly what the other wants.

[Ruth]

So beautiful! Jack, this tenderly brushes the skin on a chilled day....the yearning, the understanding....wow...the colour, vibrancy and the use of old style language...just a beauty of a piece! x

[Jack...]

Poppy, my smile is because of your kindness. Thank you so very much.

[Ruth]

Always my pleasure hon x

[SHEEMA HUQ]

You have a great talent for writing, I found this prose very moving, very well done Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. I am happy you spent a few minutes in my world today and enjoyed my work.

[Zahra]

And a successful experiment. A strong piece, amazing imagery.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend, happy you visited and enjoyed my poem.

[MsJewel]

I would say your experiment was a great success.

I love the images you created, the emotion in each line, the longing for the one you love. Absolutely stunning in every way Jack.

:) Julie

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Julie for your kind words today.

[Emerald Seas]

Love the range in this poem, Jack. You hit the waves perfectly, each hollow roll you surf along with vivid imagery and a depth of emotion that pulls your reader into the scene. The thorough love expressed rises up to a wave top, frothing over to have us wallowing along side you in all the feelings. Seriously enjoyed the ride on this one, my friend. Excellent!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend. Happy you stopped by for a visit. You have been missed.

[Emerald Seas]

New job :) It's been a wickedly busy week!
As usual, I've had thoughts to write, but no time to write them down when they hit me. I'll be around as time permits... Enjoy your weekend!