Your man

 

 

 

Your man

 

O’ fallen leaf of barren branch

doth charge my heart, my aching heart

with missing you, needing you

On sun dried earth I lay,

grasping at my dreams, so desperate,

find that in this depth

felled by wind of colder days,

my life doth need your touch

so very much it calls to thee,

come to me, cover me

shower me with hope…

so far you stand

~

I feel as if I am a tiny creature,

an ant on the pavement

with cracks and crevice deep

Foundling for the distance far,

searching of a path to reap

to thy heart, thy arms

O’ breath of love I beg thee home,

to lie with you this eve,

this winters eve

of far off arches and grayish glare

~

My travels take me long away

Places I am lost to stay

find this boy a’ crying

tears of love for thee, tears of despair

Crying, weeping, hoping, begging,

come to me,

come to me my love, my dream

into my open arms…waiting

~

The day might fill the emptiness

with broken branches barren so

dare I say I have the right

to honor love from you,

hold it so within my heart aching

My needs are many,

the truth has shown

for languished features painted hard,

hard against my weathered skin, rough, broken

I scream, my voice still faint of tone,

louder as is nothing less

sorted by the evening breeze

blowing strong against the fence

~

I desire thee to touch me,

kiss me, hold me, take me

The flames of passion brightly burn

igniting but this love I hold

So cherished is your heart

I feel it pounding, pulsing

within mine own chest

My quest is you and only you,

design me, I am yours,

make me as you would,

carve me, bend me, mould me

sculpt me to be,

your man

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Go easy on me, this was an experiment

Reviews

[Tom]

I prey Mrs Tom does not come across this poem, if so she'll be wondering why I am not this good !
( In every sense of the meaning) !!

'Do with me as you will' ! Commitment and devotion doesn't get any better than this, superb indeed Jack !

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Tom. Truly you have humbled me today with your kind words. Sometimes it works out and sometimes it doesn't...happy this one did for you.

[Tom]

You are welcome my friend !

[Catherine Frain]

This is so pretty. Really unique and can give a good insight to a man's thoughts for a woman.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Katie for your kind words.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Jack... I don't know such thoughts visit men's mind as well? I thought it was all us romantic girls who tend to be this mushy mushy. Maybe I have underestimated the complexity of male's psyche. I apologize. :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Blue. I can't speak for the rest of the male population, but perhaps you underestimated my psyche. :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

haha I apologize. :)

[Jack...]

No apology needed. :)

[Justsimplyjulia]

Stunningly beautiful. Breath taking. I felt every drop of anguish....
-D.H

[Jack...]

Thank you so much for your kind words Dragon.

[annie lee]

This is very romantic. I felt it went in several directions though, and I got a little muddled. But it is lovely language and sentiment.

[Jack...]

Thanks Annie. I know what you mean. Like I said, it was an experiment. I actually closed my eyes and let my fingers go. (I did correct mistakes afterwards.) :)

[Frieda P]

Sigh, it doesn't get much more romantic than this, having a man willing to mold himself for your love....mission accomplished whatever kind of experiment this was, you succeeded in winning hearts!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Frieda. I always appreciate your visits to my poetry.

[WithLoveandLoss.]

Such desperation and will to be altered for the one you love...oh, where love takes you! Brave, honest, and powerful. Loved it.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words. Happy you enjoyed this one.

[icelandicblue]

I think your experiment works quite well. I especially like your ending:

design me, I am yours,
make me as you would,
carve me, bend me, mould me
sculpt me to be,
your man

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Anne.

[TL Boehm]

such intensity in this piece - and that inescapable "I'm not worthy" sentiment that permeates the beautiful words. Its not true - but when we are denied the object of our affections - its all about the roughness, the weathering and the broken branches. That is the landscape of our hearts.

[Jack...]

You are so correct my friend. Thank you so very much.

[Angel]

WOW!!
I love when the dance is wild and free...I love to move in whatever direction the music takes me!
This is beautiful, Jack...

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my sweet friend.