I think, I've read such kinda lyrics before by an other writer. Again a poem my eyes catch to read about love, how interesting is this that since the morning am consecutively reading pieces of love. Ah! This world's, I think, poured into the drops of melted love. Lol! Your good at writing!
May God Bless You!
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thanks so much. I do write about love often. Well, 98% of the time. I appreciate your kind words tod.. read moreThanks so much. I do write about love often. Well, 98% of the time. I appreciate your kind words today.
Very nice and lyrical. Somehow it reminds this ole lady of some song that was popular in her salad days. Your poem is much better than the song, and could probably be matched to music fairly well. I really enjoyed the structure and the rhythm.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Annie. Which song would that be?
I like the consistency of the thought and the pattern. The sincerity of the speaker can be felt. However, I was hoping for an abrupt change, like a dramatic shift, or unexpected twist. It's not really a big deal but I think this piece would be better with that element. Also, the lines used are cliche. I've read many of your poems, Jack, and I love your writing style and wordcraft. This one somehow doesn't seem to "sink in my heart" like your other pieces. But that doesn't mean this poem sucks, okay? :) Your writings are awesome and we all know that. :)
Just my opinion... Have a great day! :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Yeah, I know what you mean, at least as far as the cliche. This is candy box poetry I think, but I j.. read moreYeah, I know what you mean, at least as far as the cliche. This is candy box poetry I think, but I just started writing and this is what I ended up with. As far as a dramtic twist, often I bring that element into my work, but this time I must have been eating chocolate while writing. :) Thanks so much my friend. I appreciate your comments, your point of view and your poetic friendship.
Awww this is so very beautiful, Jack! Your poetry always touches my heart. :) As always, you were able to keep it simple and easy to read, and yet you said so much. There are many emotions in this poem, but most of all - the purest form of love. Excellent job, my dear friend!
Thank you so very much LSD. Nice to see you visiting my world again. How have you been?
11 Years Ago
I have been good, thank you. :) I was sick last week and on top of it my internet was down for a few.. read moreI have been good, thank you. :) I was sick last week and on top of it my internet was down for a few days so I have been offline for a while now. But it's good to be back, and even better to have these wonderful masterpieces of yours, waiting for me to read them.
11 Years Ago
You are too kind to me. Happy to hear you are feeling better.
Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..