Undressing nature

A rendezvous with nature

 

 

 

 

Undressing nature

 

Lovely pink roses on a stone wall
like buttons on a cotton dress
climbing to the top
opening when the light finds
so many interludes frolicking beyond the
painted iron gate

Swinging hinges sing the melody of love
as soft thorns pull at cloth canopies
of translucent chiffon and soft lace hue,
releasing vine clung threads,
knotted of perfume, watching as buttons
free fall to the lawn, like so many petals

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

You had me from the title Jack for it is a powerful thing to describe nature as a woman and a woman as nature undressing their beauty...Marvelous...:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[David Scott]

Nice poetic play here Jack.
I have seen you flip metaphors like this before and I like it.
Instead of petals falling like buttons, you say that the observation is seen as buttons falling like petals.
I could see the first stanza play this way too if it had read something like, "A cotton dress laced with buttons like lovely pink roses climbing to the top of a stone wall"... then as written. It give a new feel to the poem when we flip these metaphors on each other.
You have taught me something valuable here Jack!
I so glad I was blessed to read this today.

[Jack...]

David, my word, this has to be one of the best comments/reviews I have ever received. Thank you so very much. I truly do appreciate you stopping by today. I understand what you mean by the first verse, but honestly, this was prompted by something I heard today. Someone complaining about grasshoppers eating their roses and finished it by saying, they'd like nothing more than to see "loevly pink roses on a stone wall." That intrigued me and that is why I open the poem this way. Thanks again my friend.

[David Scott]

Oh I did not intend to imply you should have written this differently at all. I was showing you how your word play made me go back and re read the first stanza and find even more of a treasure here.
I'm glad you enjoyed the reflections I gave you as I experienced your work.
You are welcome.

[Jack...]

No problem, I understand. Thanks again my friend.

[S C]

This makes me think of the love I felt in a spring time garden a couple of years back. Dancing in the sweet scented grass. Lovely read!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. I appreciate you stopping by and leaving such kind words for me.