Place it on me...please

For a friend who is in pain

 

 

Place it on me...please

 

 

My heart cries

of this pain she feels

Draped in nightmare cloth,

heavy weave of iron bars and barbed wire jagged

Stealing her smile, breaking her will,

devouring happiness before it blooms

 

Tormenting tint on broken windows

and shards of anxious reaching

with extended arms that long to hold her,

much too short, but still trying…never giving up

Tears fall of distant eyes,

voices scream in angst of denial

 

For I stand here demanding this pain,

begging, pleading to the heavens…

place it on me, take me to my knees,

for it is there that I crumble anyway,

a massive heap on crushed posies

staring on me with sorrowed eyes

 

Pounding the asphalt, my palms bleed

blood mingles with gravel,

red clings to visions as worry wreaks my gut

To feel helpless… worthless

Cussing blinded metaphors

of withered understanding

 

Take my heart, for it knows not the pain

yet feels it in waves of despair…

crashing of desires and needs,

dreaming it with open eyes and blistered imagination

Hear my plea, take it from her

place it on me…please

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Summer]

I hope your friend feels better soon and hopefully the pain doesn't last much longer. This is a wonderful write.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much

[SyberRose]

Penned with compassion and sensitivity Jack...i can tell not a cold bone in your body...nicely done...Rose

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Rose.

[Dr. Wood ?]

you never disappoint jack.....Pain and suffering....if only we could share it with those poor inflicted ones..or even take it on to give them the respite they deserve....Brilliant portrayal of this situation my friend

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[Larry Dyson]

quoted you on facebook..."Take my heart, for it knows not the pain

yet feels it in waves of despair…

crashing of desires and needs,

dreaming it with open eyes and blistered imagination

Hear my plea, take it from her

place it on me…please"
seemed fitting for a friend...hope that serves as inspiration on your writing my friend?

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. I truly appreciate it. Every kind word or gesture I receive is an inspiration to me. Thank you again.

[Zahra]

A beautiful poem with sentiments showering straight from heart. This is all a friend wants to know, whether their friends can really feel their pain. Amazing piece

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Zahra. Don't know how I missed this one. I truly appreciate your kind words always.

[InsanityWriter]

Absolutely breathtaking... I could sense a real desperation and sorrow in this piece. Beautifully done.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend.

[Emily B]

so many don't truly know compassion, i was intrigued once by the idea that there might be a connection between the words passion and patience, i learned finally that both comwe from the greek root pati- (it means to suffer)

it didn't really surprise me much when i realized that compassion thus means suffering with someone

blessings to all the compassionate ones

[Jack...]

Thank you for visitng today Emily. I really appreciate you.

[Sami Khalil]

"red clings to visions as worry wreaks my gut

To feel helpless… worthless

Cussing blinded metaphors

of withered understanding



Take my heart, for it knows not the pain"
Only a loving and a compassionate heart can write like this and give life to words and healing to pains...A splendid one...:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Sami for your always kind and endearing words.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Keith]

Excellent write, at some time we all see one we love in pain and wish we could bear the pain for them. Here you have found a way to put it into words.

[Jack...]

Thank so much Keith...nice hairdo.

[Keith]

Thanks mate, I just had a trim. Do you think it's too short?

[Jack...]

I think it looks perfect, very suave and debonair.

[Keith]

Oh thank you Jack! I just got brand new pair of size 28 shoes as well, yes suave is what I was aiming
for.

[Frieda P]

This is beautiful Jack, full of compassion & empathy, you have a huge heart, it always shines through in whatever you write, can't say enough.... Your kindness has been all-encompassing always my dear friend.

[Jack...]

Frieda, you have always been a good friend to me and I cherish my friends. Thank you so very much for your kind words and being my friend.