Place it on me...please

For a friend who is in pain

 

 

Place it on me...please

 

 

My heart cries

of this pain she feels

Draped in nightmare cloth,

heavy weave of iron bars and barbed wire jagged

Stealing her smile, breaking her will,

devouring happiness before it blooms

 

Tormenting tint on broken windows

and shards of anxious reaching

with extended arms that long to hold her,

much too short, but still trying…never giving up

Tears fall of distant eyes,

voices scream in angst of denial

 

For I stand here demanding this pain,

begging, pleading to the heavens…

place it on me, take me to my knees,

for it is there that I crumble anyway,

a massive heap on crushed posies

staring on me with sorrowed eyes

 

Pounding the asphalt, my palms bleed

blood mingles with gravel,

red clings to visions as worry wreaks my gut

To feel helpless… worthless

Cussing blinded metaphors

of withered understanding

 

Take my heart, for it knows not the pain

yet feels it in waves of despair…

crashing of desires and needs,

dreaming it with open eyes and blistered imagination

Hear my plea, take it from her

place it on me…please

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is when prayers or pleas should be answered...a total giving of oneself expressed here...

total selflessness...

a beautiful but very painful poem.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Jacob.

[Kelly Scheppers]

This takes me back to when my mom lost her remaining leg, dying just two days afterwards. I found a note that my step-father had written, a plea to the Lord, to take her pain away and make it his. I still have the note to this day, and he is now dying of cancer.

I cannot tell you how much this touched me, as I'm sure it will touch the heart of every reader. Your compassion is immeasurable, Jack...as is your friendship!

My best,
Kelly

[Jack...]

Kelly, I appreciate you leaving such kind words for me and I am happy you could feel something in this poem, though it seems a sad memory, I am sorry for that, but I truly appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.

[MsJewel]

It is difficult to see the one(s) we love in pain...

Take my heart for it knows not the pain
yet it feels it in waves of despair...

hear my plea, take it from her
place it on me...please

There is so much compassion in your words, written with so much emotion. A poem that touched my heart and one I will remember and read again.

:) Julie

[Jack...]

Thank you Julie. I am so happy you enjoyed this.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

The worst pain is seeing our loves ones in pain. Very moving and poignant. Very well done my friend.

[Jack...]

Thank you Mehak for stopping by and leaving such kind words.

[Troy Henson]

Watching the ones we love in pain is so hard Jack. You have captured the emotion in this well. A heartfelt write.
Regards
Troy

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Troy.

[Rita L. Sev]

It is so hard to see someone we love suffer... but we each must learn from our own pain...

Cussing blinded metaphors
of withered understanding...

Makes me think of well-meaning intruders, spouting platitudes. A poem of staunchest camaraderie, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you Rita. Your words always make me smile.

[Anand Sehgal]

Tormenting tint on broken windows

and shards of anxious reaching

with extended arms that long to hold her,

much too short, but still trying…never giving up

Tears fall of distant eyes,

voices scream in angst of denial

eternal imagery. Loved the write

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much.

[ANTO]

Man hath no greater love ... you have a huge heart Jack...
Bravo!!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend.

[Pryde Foltz]

A very powerful and well-penned write. So naturalistic but romantic in the deed you would do if you only could. This one cuts through to the soul. Awesome.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Pryde. Always I appreciate you

[Angel]

There is nothing that makes one feel so helpless as to watch someone we care about in agony. We want so badly to take the pain from them...but we can't.
This is so beautiful, Jack...there are no words to tell you how deeply this has touched my heart.
My heart is with you...

[Jack...]

Angel, my sweet friend. Your words are always a comfort. Thank you so much.