Place it on me...please

For a friend who is in pain

 

 

Place it on me...please

 

 

My heart cries

of this pain she feels

Draped in nightmare cloth,

heavy weave of iron bars and barbed wire jagged

Stealing her smile, breaking her will,

devouring happiness before it blooms

 

Tormenting tint on broken windows

and shards of anxious reaching

with extended arms that long to hold her,

much too short, but still trying…never giving up

Tears fall of distant eyes,

voices scream in angst of denial

 

For I stand here demanding this pain,

begging, pleading to the heavens…

place it on me, take me to my knees,

for it is there that I crumble anyway,

a massive heap on crushed posies

staring on me with sorrowed eyes

 

Pounding the asphalt, my palms bleed

blood mingles with gravel,

red clings to visions as worry wreaks my gut

To feel helpless… worthless

Cussing blinded metaphors

of withered understanding

 

Take my heart, for it knows not the pain

yet feels it in waves of despair…

crashing of desires and needs,

dreaming it with open eyes and blistered imagination

Hear my plea, take it from her

place it on me…please

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Vani Jalagar]

"Pounding the asphalt, my palms bleed
blood mingles with gravel,
red clings to visions as worry wreaks my gut"
felt it in depth.......very powerful poetry..........thank you for sharing :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for stopping by and leaving such kind words for me.

[I Am Svetlana]

I love the meaning behind this, of taking away someone's pain to put it on yourself instead. In order to see them not suffer anymore. Everyday, I beg for pain to seize me in some way, any way that it can so I can be aware and know that I am still feeling. Still alive. Worth something.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Svetlana for your visit. I know I am alive but would not hesitate to take the pain from a friend if I could.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Jack - the anguish in the plot lines here...with each stanza just gets more and more into the lines as a reader goes into this verse...each line of each stanza opens with a lot of emotion distress and you feel the impact...

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...Jack...nice touch with this one...

[Poetic Beauty]

I think I read this the other day...anyway it is hard to watch someone dear to you struggle with pain, whether it be, mental or physical. The emotions in this piece are strong and heartfelt.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[shallimarRose]

Jack... Such a strong poem.. This one is so openly bleeding ink in pain and love..
I think we all (us ladies) wish someone felt that strongly about us.. We suffer depression heartache, loneliness.. for someone to love so much that he would have all her pain put upon himself to protect her is just a beautiful thought..

A very old song came to my mind when I read the last lines.. It says when she reaches that side of the mountain lord don't you know what she's worth. Please give her my share of heaven , 'cause she's been through hell here on earth".. yes its a country song.. lol But the thought of that strong a love touches me so deeply. Rose

[Jack...]

Rose, your kind words are always my heaven. Thank you so very much for always finding a way to make me smile.

[Joyce S. Greene]

The greatest love is being willing to shoulder another's pain. You have expressed this willingness so beautifully, Jack. You have written a wonderful poem testifying to your love and devotion.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Joyce.

[Christine Jackson]

My heart cries and I feel your pain.

[Jack...]

Hey there Christine. Thank you so very much.

[Lydia Shutter]

The raw and honest emotions in this one touched me deeply. Your selflessness is intense....and beautiful. Lydi**

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Sweet Lydi.

[Mark]

So powerful. A feeling of helplessness anger sorrow. Well done my friend.

[Jack...]

Thanks Mark, I appreciate it.

[Aethereal]

There's no escape from the poignancy of a life well lived, one having both joy and sorrow. If you walk through the halls of most any critical care hospital, you'll feel the tension especially if children are involved.

[Jack...]

I am certain you are correct my friend. Thank you for your visit.