Free as a bird...now

Written with the help of lyrics by Lynryd Skynyrd

 

 

 

 

Free as a bird…now

 

 

“If I leave here tomorrow”

 

Lonely days of glass dividers and tissue boxes

Pecking away like a chisel on some old piece of granite

Feeling the pain of each sorrowed sentence

Carving words on obsolete paper in faded scratch marks

 

“Would you still remember me?”

 

My reflection finds me a stranger of warped shapes

Names bounce off of walls and scatter to the stained floor

I have read those pieces of promised hope and lover’s sins

Said my peace in volumes straight from my heart

 

“For I must be traveling on now”

 

It seems the shadows have faded into a still breeze

Hectic lives infuse dancing dreams with left over cottage cheese

Faces are seen, hiding in plain site, hoping not to be found

Bins overflow with the un-perused and wishful thinking

 

“Cause there’s too many places I’ve got to see”

 

Beyond this horizon is calling in a faint echo

Winding paths offering more than what I have, whispering on slow winds

Forgotten, in due time, as another sun sets

And a mourning dove coos my sad farewell

 

“I’m as free as a bird…

 

now”

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Daisy]

I loved the concept.......... Free as a bird
it's wonderful

[Astro]

I love these pieces that you weave songs around, I'll have to try it someday. This one is great because it can be read in different ways, with the lyrical highlights strengthening it. On the one, you have the end come and release the pain of life alone longing for the return of someone loved and on the other it could be a renewed vision released from the pain of constant longing, a moving forward now that the soul has healed enough to see past the sadness and the acceptance that there is still life worth living. Deep and powerful stuff my friend.

[Jack...]

Astro, my friend, if you do try one. make sure I know about it. I would love to read it.

[Astro]

Will do my friend

[TL Boehm]

Gives a whole new veneer on that song - one I never considered. WOnderful and melancholy poetry all at the same time. That last verse is especially poignant. Almost made me tear up. Yes. It was that strongly written.

[Jack...]

Tammy, my friend, never would I intentionally want to make you cry. Thank you ever so much.

[s y e]

A very good write my friend. Nice job, hauntingly brilliant.

[Jack...]

Thank you Sye.

[icelandicblue]

This is quite beautiful and haunting. You've done the song proud Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Anne.

[Lydia Shutter]

The Lynryd Synryd anthem will never be the same for me. You really have done the lines from the song justice. I am impressed by the varied styles in which you write, Jack. You have a lot of talent! Lydi**

[Jack...]

Thank you Lydi. Being a piano player, Freebird has always been one of my favs.

[MsJewel]

I love the creativity of this piece Jack...weaving your words with a well known song. You are unique in your writing and I have quickly become a huge fan. Amazing work here!

:) Julie

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Julie. It is fun to take a favorite song like "Freebird" and work with it to create something new.

[Mark]

Very emotional piece, it certainly has changed my view of that iconic song.

[Jack...]

Thanks Mark. One of my favorite songs, it never grows old on me...I just grow old on it.

[kublakhan27]

I always wish I could write more in these reviews but I'm too blown away by your style and voice...you have such a unique way of looking at the world...incredible work as always my friend.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Steve. I feel the same about your work. I appreciate your visit.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you in return my friend, that means a lot to hear.

[Troy Henson]

You have done something great with this one Jack. It's not an easy thing to do....taking lines of a song and having them work in well with a write.....purely mastreful.

Regards
Troy

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Troy