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A Poem by Jack...
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Clipped wings

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Heart upon a runway, cluttered tarmacs

wings of silver and broken promises

luggage is lost in sadder dreams

waiting beyond my imagination

ID shows some smiling man

tears don’t match the face

detained and searched

rushed gates scream

like cattle pushed

offered peanuts

as I miss the

last flight

to your

love

 

 

j

© 2013 Jack...


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Jack...
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this was great...I stay away from airports and all the hassles now...nicely done Jack and have a safe trip.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Rose.
I loved the structure of this write, Jackomantic - Beautifully presented as always, and some good metaphors.

Have a safe flight, my friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much sweetie.
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oh, very creatively presented.... and i think the ending is cleverly done as metaphor... great piece mr. J!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend. I appreciate your visit and your knid words.
Great metaphor, Jack! I like how you carried this one throughout; the flight imagery really gave us a good feel for the way that sometimes life can step in and "delay" us and we have no way of doing anything about it. I loved the imagery, and then the last three lines bring it back down to the personal and emotional. Interesting format as well...difficult to get right, I can imagine. I don't think I could pen something in this form; my pieces are way too scattered :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Sarah. I actually wrote this while making airline reservations yesterday, I guess I w.. read more
Wonderfully executed, Jack - love the form of this piece.

ID shows some smiling man
tears don’t match the face...

A very poignant image...

Well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Rita.
The visual effect here gives the words a stronger affect towards this emotions of "missing out"...
We have all felt that sinking feeling o missing the bus or the plane. You tap into this familiar feeling to give profound emotions to simple words.
I like the power in this craft! Well done Jack.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank so much David. I always look forward to your reviews.
First of all, shame on me for taking so long to review some of you work...our paths seem to cross a lot but I always get sidetracked by, well, everything haha

This is an ingeniously-crafted piece...the downward spiral of heartbreak and/or lost love is made all the more palpable by it...I was totally intrigued by the ID image, and how we never seem to see ourselves in those photos, which are supposed to be our most definitive proof of existence...a lot of soul and pain and emotion in this piece, great work here Jack.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so very much Steve. I do appreciate your kind words and I need to visit your world more mysel.. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

I look forward to it my friend, feel free to take your time though...I never want people to feel pre.. read more
Jack this is a great read. Love the form... like a plane coming into the runway.. Here at LAX thats on the news constantly.. Who cant get in, who cant get out.. I've never been on a plane... maybe one day i'll try.. it would have to be a really good reason.. Well penned sweet Jack.. xo

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend.
Are you leaving? Where are you going? great job on this. I think, if i remember correctly, it's called the pyramid? Am I right?

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mrs.Murs

11 Years Ago

That's cool, are you leaving though?
Jack...

11 Years Ago

Just a business trip for a few days, not disappearing. :)
Mrs.Murs

11 Years Ago

that's good.
Wow, very impressive Jack. Love the format as well as the bittersweet emotions expressed throughout this write. Safe travels, my friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Traci. I truly appreciate you coming to the WC airport to see me off. :) I do appre.. read more
Traci

11 Years Ago

Always a pleasure to read your work, Jack. I know I can count on something quite unique that leaves.. read more

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San Antonio, TX



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Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..

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