Take me

Written for "The Raven" poetry contest

 

 

 

Take me

 

Once upon a midnight dreary, as I ponder weak and weary

Falling as a distant star comes reaching of my heart

Knees connect with fertile soil, darkness on this hour loyal

Twilight bid its fond farewell as evening spends its start

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Chilled this open field a’ rest, facing east my own confess

Silence comes in wintered thoughts a’ calling to my mind

Lone is found this majesty, a’ born mine lonely eyes to see

There upon the heavens form this beauty I do find

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Reaching for your open hand, actions of an empty man

Seeking but the wisdom that shall lead me to your side

Grasping at the frosted air, evermore I long to share

In amongst these feelings glowing bright this velvet sky

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Take me, oh this soul does plead, thee shall be my every need

Endless I shall cherish every vision sent above

As a light does glisten free, when your smile my heart does see

To fend this winter evening with the warmth of your sweet love

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

warmth, love, beauty...even though the form is the same, the first line is Poe--the lightness, the uplifting feeling of this poem is so you, Jack...

always a lover with the pen.

jacob

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Jacob.

[Sheila Kline]

Eddie just posted a note about "The Raven Contest" still being open so I came to check out the finalists and found your enchanting, beautiful write of love.........oh my!! It is absolutely mesmerizing, takes my breath away and the most endearing write of a Raven I have ever read.........gets my vote!! Once upon a midnight dreary makes a memorable night of love!!!
And a favorite for sure!!!!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Shelia. Poe was a romantic in my opinion and I do love writing, or attempting to write along his lines.

[Sheila Kline]

Yes he was Jack, and his write of "Annabell Lee" is one of my favorite poems - sad, but so beautiful!!

[TL Boehm]

taking the frigid night and making it beautiful. Well done.

[Jack...]

I just use your reviews to keep me warm Tammy. Thanks so much.

[Astro]

"To fend this winter evening with the warmth of your sweet love" Sometimes wishes are more beautiful than we could ever know. I'm not sure how well you did in the competition, but I think there is a strong chance with this one that an award might be in order. Well done Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[Astro]

You're very welcome.

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is beautiful with a hint of melancholy. Your rhythm, rhyme and flow are perfectly done. I am always in awe of your poetry.. lovely words!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Lori. I appreciate your kind words.

[shallimarRose]

Lovely poem Jack ..Raven Contest?

my offering for the contest is a humorous one.. I already had a poem with those two opening lines lol "Switched" ...

[Jack...]

Thanks so much sweet Rose.

[Pryde Foltz]

Lovely, lovely piece, eerie and romantic. Good luck, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Pryde.

[Frieda P]

As always your rhymes flow like fine wine Jack, I love that you brought nature into the mix also...the warmth of a sweet smile on a blustery day is charming.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my amazing friend. Your kind words are always warmth to me.

[SyberRose]

Skillfully penned Jack as always...loved the form and executed in your inimitably beautiful style...Rose:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much sweet Rose. Happy you enjoyed this.

[Rita L. Sev]

If Poe simply wrote love poems without the macabre elements, it would sound like this... gorgeous flow and spot-on rhyme, your usual romantic theme with an added richness. Nicely done, Jack!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Rita. I really wasn't even aware of the contest until I read your wonderful poetry this morning. But seeing as how Poe is one of my favorites, I had no choice but to try and write something. I am happy you enjoyed it.