Hi Jack. You paint a vivid picture with this well crafted traditional Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form that's so smooth and romantic. Very good use of brevity. Good presentation. Lovely depth of feeling. Masterful. Good word choice. Nice alliteration. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so very much Shelley. I just love your reviews.
11 Years Ago
You're very welcome Jack. It's always a pleasure to read your poetry. When I write reviews, I just t.. read moreYou're very welcome Jack. It's always a pleasure to read your poetry. When I write reviews, I just tell the poet how the poetry makes me feel; I also try to express how well it is written and what elements of poetry helps with the movement and beauty of the piece. It helps me to write poetry better when I read and review poets as talented as you. So, thank you Jack. Have a good night!
Oh Jack, I'm almost insulted that you have to ask, you know you always have my heart ;) Hehe but seriously this was great, very romantic, you've got a very beautiful heart. You must have been a real ladies man back in the day my good sir ;)
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Shhh Forgotten, there are people listening. Thanks so much my friend.
BACK IN THE DAY.. read moreShhh Forgotten, there are people listening. Thanks so much my friend.
Haha you know what you're right, you're very much the ladies man now. You can have all the muscles .. read moreHaha you know what you're right, you're very much the ladies man now. You can have all the muscles in the world, but if you can write poetry and say the right words ladies just fall right in your arms, I'm sure you're no stranger to this ;)
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Thanks my friend. Just having some fun.
11 Years Ago
That's the best way to go :) Always a pleasure to read your poetry
Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..