Love Boat Senryu

Love Boat Senryu

A Poem by Jack...
"

Would you drop anchor with me?

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If hearts were a ship

On an endless sea of love

Would you sail with me?

 

 

 

© 2013 Jack...


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Jack...
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Now how would a lady ever resist that romantic proposal.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Depends on the sailor. Thanks my friend.
This is perfect! Yes, I feel the love.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Your kind words are much enjoyed this morning. Thank you Brianna
YESSSSS!!!!! oops sorry still in character... lol
I love this Jack, short and sweet.. xo Rose

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

But the voyage will be long and fun. :) Thanks so much my sweet friend.
shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Bon Voyage?? Im coming with.. I could use a lil get away from reality... lol
No I bleeding would not you saucy thing! Nice senyru though!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

LOL John...
Jack...

11 Years Ago

Damn, you took the wind out of my sails. Thanks alot John. :)
Who would not wish to sail away with you, Jack?
What a pretty little valentine...LOL...
I love it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much my sweet friend.
A great example of less being more in this piece, Jack - this senryu expresses all that needs to be said... :)

The pic, though, reminded me of those Valentine cards kids distribute, which got me thinking about an episode of the Simpsons... :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Wow, now I just need some fluffy white clouds and blue hair and i am set. Thanks so much Rita.
This reminds me of "Love Boat"...I loved that movie. lol :D

Cute Senryu, Jack! Very sweet!~xoxo~:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend.
Robbie~xoxo~

11 Years Ago

My pleasure! :)
This is lovely, my sweet friend, a silly question if you ask me though. ;) You don't need to ask, I'm sure anyone would sail with you.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks my sweet friend.
Hi Jack. You paint a vivid picture with this well crafted traditional Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form that's so smooth and romantic. Very good use of brevity. Good presentation. Lovely depth of feeling. Masterful. Good word choice. Nice alliteration. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank you so very much Shelley. I just love your reviews.
ShelleyA

11 Years Ago

You're very welcome Jack. It's always a pleasure to read your poetry. When I write reviews, I just t.. read more
Oh Jack, I'm almost insulted that you have to ask, you know you always have my heart ;) Hehe but seriously this was great, very romantic, you've got a very beautiful heart. You must have been a real ladies man back in the day my good sir ;)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Forgotten

11 Years Ago

Haha you know what you're right, you're very much the ladies man now. You can have all the muscles .. read more
Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks my friend. Just having some fun.
Forgotten

11 Years Ago

That's the best way to go :) Always a pleasure to read your poetry

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Jack...

San Antonio, TX



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Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..

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