Dead Alarm Clock Senryu

Can't you see I'm sleeping?

 

 

 

 

Lost within a dream

where she holds me in her arms

KILL THE ALARM CLOCK!!!!

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[ANTO]

Just as John Lennon said "I'm only sleeping...." ;)
Class senryu Jack - enjoyed very much

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend.

[shallimarRose]

lol.... I know right? and its almost impossible to pick up where you left off... "oh just let me dream" xo

[Jack...]

You've got that right Rose. Thanks so much.

[s y e]

Ugh, that darn alarm clock, you got it, too. I throw mine at my wall, just missing my TV, ha. Made me laugh, so thanks, my dear friend.

[Jack...]

Thanks my friend.

[Rita L. Sev]

Hahaha! Actually LOL-ing here, Jack! Damn clock... :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Rita.

[Jack...]

LOL I've been wondering how much time I held a baseball bat, instead of a gun, but what a fantastic 5-7-5 Jack, it's a pleasure reading your humor... now we need an futuristic alarm clock which can turn back the time, before we smash it.... splendid.

- Elisa

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend. If only we knew what we were going to dream about ahead of time, we could just turn it off with the lights.

That would be even more nice.... and replay it with the light too... lol

[Frieda P]

Hahaha I think I was having the same exact dream as Angi, Hugh sure does get around!! Very clever Senryu Jack!

[Jack...]

Well don't forget his last name is Jack Man. At least he has good taste in last names. Thanks Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Ahah! Was that you in disguise? ;-)

[Jack...]

You mean the one with butter knives taped to his hands? Yeah that was me. :)

[Frieda P]

Phahaha, is that like sour grapes hon? lol

[Jack...]

No not at all. What does he have that I don't? A great body, fantastic hair and a bunch of money? hell I have a body, some hair and a few bucks, see we have a lot in common. :)

[Frieda P]

He does show tunes too. ;-)

[Jack...]

Old man river, that old man river...that's nothing. I sang solo at The Phantom of the Opera once! (so low no one could hear me)

[Angi]

Ha! This is so true! I was dreaming the other morning and damn if my alarm clock didn't chase Hugh Jackman away. Grrr. Angi~

[Jack...]

Damn, now I have battle Hugh Jackman too. :) Thanks so much Angi.

[Angi]

Ha! Lmao, Jack!

[ShelleyA]

Jack this is great! Bravo!! A skillfully crafted Senryu; perfect syllabic form. I love the accompanying picture. It made me laugh. Vivid imagery and descriptives. Good depth of feeling; excellent aha moment in line three. A wonderful contrast to the first two lines of your poem. Love the humor. Excellent word choice. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Shelley.

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Jack. Have a great day!

[Zahra]

cool senryu, superb. The image's really interesting as well

[Jack...]

Thank you Zahra...just having a little fun.

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. In a way true and funny at the same time. When you are in both arms and the alarm annoys you or both you kill it for you don't want any annoyance or breaking the state of bliss...Wonderful...:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Sami

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)