She loves me, she loves me not

How many petals will it take?

“She loves me, she loves me not”

 

 

 

“She loves me, she loves me not”

 

Petal by small white petal I ask

of this delicate bloom I now hold in my hand

Yellow face peering up at me as if it wants to answer

in only a way that will make me happy

 

“She loves me, she loves me not”

 

But does it know the answer I seek,

for I do want her to love me, like she loves the flowers,

the ocean and sipping tea by twilight music

filling the tree lined silhouettes with melodies of enchantment

 

“She loves me, she loves me not”

 

Two more petals fall to the ground,

creating elongated oval patterns about my feet

like ivory snow flakes flittering in the sun,

staring up at me with questions of their own

 

“She loves me, she loves me not”

 

Maybe I will whisper my desires,

allowing them to flow on the wind,

absorbed by nature, dispersed upon the beauty,

in hopes this earthly decoration might understand

 

“She loves me, she loves me not”

 

As nature offers her wonders, she too brings them

In perfectly presented symmetrical fashion

for I see there are only four petals remaining,

the count stays even

 

“She loves me, she loves me not”

 

Oh poor flower, shedding petals like tears,

do they flood your core as they do my heart

Fear not my petite friend, for I stand in a field

of your brothers and sisters

 

“She loves me, she loves me not”

 

I shall pick another tender bloom

to follow my quest,

though unlike nature, I have no rules to follow

and I shall begin this time

 

“She loves me not, she loves me”

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Astro]

Great way to link the ideas up with that reoccurring image of the petals being picked and falling like moments in the past. The trial and error, the persistence they all make me smile like daisies. Never give up, there's always more petals to pick. Nice Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[Zahra]

wow how wonderfuly have you used this concept. A really heart touching piece

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Zahra. You know. I just love writing your name, the spelling is so unique and beautiful to me.

[Zahra]

oo Thank you so much, really sweet of you

[s y e]

I remember doin' this ages ago, when I was younger but now that I'm older I just forget about it all. This is such a lovely write, my friend.

~ Noodle

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[Leigh]

You have got such a direct and simple style that is so effective. I like the way you have reversed the phrase at the end to suit your need for your love.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Leigh. I appreciate it.

[Leigh]

Great watercolour, wheres that from?

[Jack...]

Just something I borrowed to adorn the poem.

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

I can remember saying "he loves me not, he loves me" when after many petals, I still hadn't gotten "he loves me." A lovely read and write.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Sharon.

[Lydia Shutter]

A charimatic write. The imagery you employ so splendidly painted a picture on the palette of my mind. So romantic and filled with desire. I liked it a lot. Lydi**

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for stopping by and leaving such kind words for me.

[Rafia ~ Yellow Girl]

Such a refreshing and rejoicing piece! :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much.

[Chris]

Jack, You put it together well and believably... and the emotion and intent carried through.

[Jack...]

Thank so much Chris. I appreciate you stopping by today.

[Pryde Foltz]

Yeah...I like this. You take a familiar image and build splendidly upon it. You had be spellbound. Fantastic word choice and structure.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much for your kind words. I am happy you enjoyed it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Jack is back! so is Freida where is that gal when you need her?
Nice return to Earth Jack, petals that speak that we may command them and discard their voices until we are satisfied.

[Jack...]

Red is back to my friend and I see Icelandicblue as well.

Thank you so much.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Why has everyone returned at the same time. Spooky reminds me of the French series 'The Retrned' lol?

[Jack...]

We were all on vacation together in Belize...didn't you get the invitation? We just returned yesterday.