As evening takes my hand

 

 

As evening takes my hand

 

 

“For in your light I dream, as evening takes my hand”

 

Silently I find my thoughts illumined by your beauty;

in soft shimmers of dancing silhouettes

and patterns allowing breaths to sigh

 

Eyes peer into velvet skies,

visions set in motion eternally, find me

stranded within the confines of my heart ~ longing for you

Desperate for but a breeze, a movement of shadow,

a hope of wishes made upon an early arrival

of this crested view

 

Lonely among the sycamore, towering soldiers

lined at fielded boundaries, claiming wisdom

as they too reach for your smile

 

“And I crave the knowledge of your distant view”

 

Do you think, do you feel, do you dream of me

from balconies high above hibiscus footpaths,

candle lit in passing moments which flicker ~ enchant

 

Sipping from a porcelain cup caressed by your hand,

a touch my body pleads, soft fingers on smooth surroundings,

ripples following a moonlight blush

of celestial blooms and shooting star showers,

flooding affections to wash over me…

carry me home

 

This moon, suspended in charcoal heavens

upon a beaded blanket of perfect pearls,

beckons our dreams in illumined cadence~ from a distance

 

“Does your heart share this moon tonight ~ with me”   

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

A lovely and enchanting write. If we have nothing else, at least we all share the moon,

[Jack...]

That we do my friend. Thank you so much.

[SyberRose]

Do you think, do you feel, do you dream of me
from balconies high above hibiscus footpaths,
candle lit in passing moments which flicker ~ enchant

You are such a romantic Jack...i love the title too...so beautiful and enchanting...Loved it...Rose

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Rose. Your smile always shows in your kind words to me.

[SyberRose]

Thank you Jack:)

[Kwiksie Ifediora]

#sigh.
A beautiful one indeed. So romantically enchanting is your depiction of nature in this one...

"Eyes peer into velvet skies,
visions set in motion eternally, find me
stranded within the confines of my heart ~ longing for you
Desperate for but a breeze, a movement of shadow,
a hope of wishes made upon an early arrival
of this crested view
Lonely among the sycamore, towering soldiers
lined at fielded boundaries, claiming wisdom
as they too reach for your smile."

I'm gonna have really sweet dreams tonight. ;)
Thanks alot Jack!

[Jack...]

Wow, I am happy I may coerce your dreams to be nice ones. Thank you so much.

[ShelleyA]

Oh Jack... this is a beautifully romantic piece. Heartfelt. Elegant and skillfully crafted free verse. Beautiful imagery, descriptives, flow and tone. Lovely metaphor - “For in your light I dream, as evening takes my hand" - simply delightful. Lovely depth of feeling, your words take my breath away. I especially like:
"stranded within the confines of my heart ~ longing for you" - and so many others. Excellent closing line. Masterful. A most enjoyable read.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Shelley. I am happy you enjoyed this.

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Jack. Always a pleasure.

[redflutterby]

So many beautiful thoughts and expressions in one poem. Fantastic Jack..
Your poems are just heavenly!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. Your words always make me smile

[Sami Khalil]

I peer upon great poetry when I read your writes Jack and gaze upon the beauty of Mother nature and above all hear your heartbeats for her...:)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Sami

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Do you think, do you feel, do you dream of me
from balconies high above hibiscus footpaths...

I don't know what is lovelier, your romantic queries or your depiction of nature in this poem. Let's just say I am so glad to see your heartbeat back here, Jack. :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Rita. The moon does have an affect on my heart.

[Jack...]

One extreme fantastic write to the drop of all the most felt romantic feelings in this beautiful piece ... I see you look at the fine edge of the cliff in order to then after paint it on canvas, all the dark and light aspects weighed, brilliant Jack, you're in true touch with your elements.

- Elisa

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my good friend for your always kind words.

De nada dear Jack :)