On borrowed steps of distant stars

On borrowed steps of distant stars

A Poem by Jack...
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Sometimes all we want to do is get back

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On borrowed steps of distant stars

 

 

Of broken branch and multi-colored stone façade

the pathway steals my outward glance

Winding through the cottage hills

like kite string freed by a strong wind, it spills

Patterns shadow in abstract array

through barbed wire and solid steel

barricades, creating menacing shapes,

criss-crossing narrow wheel ruts of long ago

 

“I tug my trousers in defiance and set my pace”

 

Obstacles, of stead and stood,

branded in a wilting wood…

directions carved to empty me of all I know as good

 

Within my chest sits a living compass,

beating my quest in a never ending melody,

sweet as creamed corn pie and pointing

towards the sun, which sits before me

two hills above the horizon on this new day

Temptation beckons over my right shoulder,

whistling in the breeze of delicious

offerings, and I do hunger…

 

“Still I stand firm of my journey back to your love”

 

Take your glow of nectarines

Cool refreshing summer streams

For I shan’t waver, not an inch, her love calls in my dreams

 

Midday, as the solar glow finds my shoulders red

and sweat clings like life in dampened conclusions,

blisters form bringing the pain of decisions made before…

and I would have it no other way…for this I deserve

Mountains faced of jagged stone break my crawl,

rubble sweeps my feet, as my knees bleed,

thirst speaks in the language of a long feared enemy…

yet I do not listen…

 

“No challenge shall be placed that will keep me from my return to you”

 

State your case in hammered stone

Tear my skin of broken bone

No tethered vines of loneliness shall sway me from my home

 

 

My shadow now waits before me, long and slender,

molded by dried weathered foot prints…my foot prints,

heading a direction opposite my heart

Many years old yet still their outline remains as a warning…

When I see it, the lilac arbor, scented in old desires and

new in life, encasing a glow, melodies of  gold finch sing

as my eyes find your smile, an extended hand, a soft touch

I have found my way home…

 

“My sweet love, this heart begs forgiveness and longs you eternally”

 

Mistakes I’ve made, my journey far

on borrowed steps of distant stars

my every waking dream desires to be right where you are

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2013 Jack...


Author's Note

Jack...
Thank you for reading

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Hi Jack,

Your love is surely true.
What an amazing Journey and worth every scar!

I enjoyed this immensely.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow. (i actually said that aloud).
this was beautiful Jack! at first the length appeared daunting but i'm glad i stopped.

such a fierce determination to reclaim a lost love, expressed so brilliantly too...thank you for sharing such great piece of art.

"Midday, as the solar glow finds my shoulders red
and sweat clings like life in dampened conclusions,
blisters form bringing the pain of decisions made before…
and I would have it no other way…for this I deserve
Mountains faced of jagged stone break my crawl,
rubble sweeps my feet, as my knees bleed,
thirst speaks in the language of a long feared enemy…
yet I do not listen…"
i think this is my favorite part. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend. I always appreciate your kind words.
"Obstacles, of stead and stood,
branded in a wilting wood…
directions carved to empty me of all I know as good"

Beautiful! beautiful! beautiful!

I usually prefer shorter poetry but you keep me interested with every beautiful line. The imagery in this poem is fantastic and your words are so lovely.

Great Job.

P.s. I'm sorry I don't review as often as I should. Surely, it is not personal. I enjoy reading your work and will do my best to return the generosity you have bestowed with your kind reviews. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank you so very much Keely Jane. I appreciate you stopping by and leaving such kind words for me.
Absolutely beautiful Jack. :) You write some of the most fantastical things!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank you so very much my friend. I always appreciate your visits and your wonderful kind words to m.. read more
wow!!!! Jack, you are back!!! As usual loved reading this and am glad to see you back

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much Cassie, I'm not 100% sure I am back, but I do pop in from time to time.
Pure brilliance on your page Jack, this is one of my favorites of yours.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank you, I am really happy you liked it. If I made you smile, then I am happy as well.
Jack this poem pushed along with a rhythm and a cadence of its own. I felt myself propelled homeward. I envisioned Inman’s return to his beloved Ada in Cold Mountain. It conjured all those who fight their way back from the brink- of sanity, war, loss- to return to themselves, to return to love. So well written.

The two lines were my favorites.
Within my chest sits a living compass,
beating my quest in a never ending melody,

And this one I know as well
thirst speaks in the language of a long feared enemy…
yet I do not listen…


Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend.
Jack I don't even know what to say .. This is by far one of the best poems I have read here. Absolutely gorgeous use of rhyme and metaphor. From the title to the endings re-emphasis.. Breath taking piece my sweet friend.. Rose

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Rose, as always, your comments and kind words humble me.
Wow...you pop them out like a Jack-O-matic machine. Now this is one example where I think triple rhymes work rather well. By encasing them in between causal verses, you have subdued their power to over whelm the reader. I absolutely love what you have done here and wish to borrow the format. You write with your heart and soul reaching us on a deeper level. Lovely!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Brianna, please be my guest. I so enjoy when you stop by for a visit. Thank you so much.
Honestly! Very well written.

Obstacles, of stead and stood,
branded in a wilting wood…
directions carved to empty me of all I know as good


Well structured and functions well too! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Shivam Murari

11 Years Ago

Well, I get it. I read it all! Well, you must have definitely evolved as a writer, for your works ar.. read more
Jack...

11 Years Ago

Shivam, actually the points and top writers list had very little to do with the "mess" I was writing.. read more
Shivam Murari

11 Years Ago

Yes, I read about it too! Its good of you to side your friend.
I hope people will take things .. read more

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Jack...

San Antonio, TX



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Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..

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