Final Words

What's final is final I guess

 

Final Words

 

 

Final words - left on the sleeve of a gabardine fabric

Penned with a tone of dismay

Conjured thoughts sending

Ideas still pending

Breaking this heart on display

Fooling not one but the many who see us

Keeping the peace if you will

Shattered glass slivers

In brittle felt shivers

glistening there on the sill

 

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Convincing myself not to want you

Hiding so deep in the mist

Changing the subject to miles instead

of longing the feel of your kiss

 

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Morning comes - stillness a blend of the moment

Gears tend to click in their time

Spinning directions

Of wondered affections

Clouds seem to sift through the blinds

Shadows are straining the view

Barren, yet leaves full in green

My head neath the pillow

To block out the willow

Now weeping the tears that I dream

 

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Opening up doors to the waiting

Humid the breeze ever stale

Swallowing pride in the lonely abyss

Facing the fact I have failed

 

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Spiders play - brushing the webs from my forehead

Losing the bounce in my step

Finding each crack

A broken push back

Debris in the caverns now swept

Clinging to what I remember

Feeling the touch of your skin

Affectionate bliss

The taste of your kiss

Never to know it again

 

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Darkness, the end of the alley

Dumpsters, a pale shade of blue

Searching for hope in the land of confusion

Lost and alone without you

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

After reading this through twice (because I didn't want to miss a single image), I am left feeling the broken heart and desolation... "Clinging to what I remember..." - cling though we may, it only feeds the loneliness. Flawless in form and rhythm, a wonderful piece, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Rita. I appreciate your friendly words to me.

[s y e]

Jack, this is such a longing write, it is so emotional and touching. A heart wrenching write from you this time.

Total opposite of what I just read! It's so amazingly sad, my friend.

You're amazing, and talented.

~ Noodle.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend.

[s y e]

Pleasure, my dear.

[icelandicblue]

This makes the heart ache. Your longing is tangible, it radiates in waves. This is just so beautifully sad jack.

[Jack...]

Anne, my friend, thank you so much for your kind words, though I'm sure you have enough sadness in your life right now without me adding to it, I do appreciate you always.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is absolutely beautiful. Not a single word out of place, not an image that wasn't painted with an eloquently skilled hand. The longing is palpable; the pain tangible and tragically unique. You have woven such a tapestry of juxtaposing images that all culminated in something that truly impacted me emotionally. My virtual hat is off to you yet again, my friend. Fantastic...

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words my friend.

[Angel]

You have a way of carrying us along on whatever journey it is you are taking...of. making us see through your eyes, the vision you are seeing.
I can feel the pain once again, of broken hearted love.
(sigh)
Ahhh, love...how beautiful and fragrant are your blossoms in the spring...and how cruel your thorns!!!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Angel. It seems I am the blue dumpster today.

[Emerald Seas]

"Searching for hope in the land of confusion" Oh, I have been to this place! Marooned on a distant shore for many, many moons. It's not good, my friend.

"Convincing myself not to want you
Hiding so deep in the mist
Changing the subject to miles instead
of longing the feel of your kiss"
Oh yes, been there too... I swear, you've conquered the romance and broken heart genre of poetry, haven't you?! You've taken us on a journey, with vivid thoughts and imagery/ Loved it!

[Jack...]

Yeah, I'm kind of an expert on the broken heart part of it... :) Thanks so much my friend.

[Emerald Seas]

You're welcome, of course. Well, I never was an expert there - but I've had a large enough dose in the past to do me for life (and no... not due to the knucklehead that sent me his wedding picture! - ha). One day, I may be the old cat lady... the rest (if I'm ever single for some odd reason) is too much heartache and pain! Blah...

[Jack...]

Hey, I like cats. :)

[Emerald Seas]

Ha - I would say something, but letting that pass... ;-)

I'm actually not crazy about them ;) anything that needs a box, cage, tank - basically that adds an object to the cleaning in the house! I'm a dog person :) but want to travel. After my Dixie passes, I will be pet-less for a long stretch.

[Jack...]

I have 3 cats, but they all live outside. (They control snakes) When I am away I just have someone stop by and feed them once a day. They are no problem, oh yeah, the occasional hair ball on the door mat, but no big deal. :)

[Emerald Seas]

Litter box - yuck! My husband is highly allergic so I couldn't tell you how I'd like them now. When I was growing up we had some land. My dad was a huge animal person (vet school after WWII) and owned his own shop for a time. Anywho... We had ROOMS full of birds, 17 cats at one time, 2 horses, chickens, 3 dogs, and stuff I am probably forgetting. It was a bit of a zoo :)

[Jack...]

Well I am not quite that bad. I have 5 acres they use as a litter box. I have two Rat Terriers who spend half of the day in and the other half out. I had only one for a while but she seemed lonely to me (I'm at work all day) so I bought her a playmate.

[Emerald Seas]

I have one cocker spaniel. She's getting slow and older - poor thing, but is a sweetheart :)

[Jack...]

And that would be Dixie?

[Emerald Seas]

Yes. I'll post a picture my daughter took of her - too cute!

[Jack...]

I would like to see that.

[Frieda P]

Okay, this is a holy cats dude one as the kimmer would say! Outstanding love this one Jack, it really took me along on this journey, bittersweet. I love this style, and your words speak volumes here, the images in my head are dancing a quick step. Just wanted to point out 'shattered glass & spiders'....hmmm, same thoughts and all that jazz, love this!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend. yep, spiders and shattered glass...go figure.

[Sami Khalil]

"Debris in the caverns now swept

Clinging to what I remember

Feeling the touch of your skin

Affectionate bliss

The taste of your kiss

Never to know it again"
A little on the dark side Jack but I still like it a lot...Well done as always...:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Sami. I always appreciate you finding my new work.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)