Truth bears the moments in time

Time is on our side

 

 

Truth bears the moments in time

 

 

Lost in the words I am reading

Pacing the floor as I go

Pointing a finger at distant endeavors

Faithfully wanting to show

 

Morals unfold the horizon

Thoughts of an endless abyss

Drain through the grate that will lead our temptation

Started with one single kiss

 

Years they have passed by so quickly

Love it was felt in our hearts

Still on this candle a flame it is burning

Even though miles we’re apart

 

Time is the ultimate keeper

Locked in its arms we now trace

Though if you look there is so much remaining

Waiting for us to embrace

 

Fate is the locket you’re wearing

There on your neck trimmed in gold

Open the door and you’ll see certain meanings

Stories about to be told

 

We had no map for this journey

Detours were scattered the way

Several wrong turns till the highway we’re driving

Brings us so close on this day

 

Tell me the truth, were you happy

For I can say I was not

Maybe these choices were made of our needing

Shadowing pasts we forgot

 

Why do we stand in the shadows

Longing for arms open wide

Tasks we have entered have not been completed

Truth bears the moments in time

 

Walls have been built in between us

Each day they fall but a few

Someday I know that the pathway will open

Allowing my love to walk through

 

I stand in this field of distraction

Answers they hover above

As I now reach for the perfect solution

I offer my heart filled with love

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A piece that leaves one quite satisfied.

[Jack...]

Thank you again my friend.

[Kristin Lee]

Time is the ultimate keeper...what a beautiful line. This is another well penned piece Jack. Time is the ultimate keeper of the heart and of knowing what is right. You've captured love so well, as you have a knack for doing.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Kristin.

[TL Boehm]

I can see the pendulum swing in this - tick: it was right tock: it shouldn't happen - the mind going back and forth a bit - its subtle like that ticking time piece one gets used to in the other room.
the line that struck me was Tell me the truth, were you happy
For I can say I was not - its like an actor breaking through the fourth wall - it jumps out of the poem - and then the wall closes again.
Well done.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Tammy

[Astro]

I can just picture you or someone pacing in thought and being carried away further into the arms of the past that are no longer real, but can still be felt. "Until we meet again" echoes in the background of this piece Jack. Very well done. I do have a question about this line though, "Detours were scattered the way" are you missing punctuation, or missing a word, or am I just too dense to connect properly to it.(that last bit could indeed be the case)

[Jack...]

Thanks Astro. No, that's what I meant to say. Maybe not proper english, but I never said i was proper. :)

[Astro]

Lol, the message is still clear. I just wasn't ready for the illogical detour.

[Jack...]

Hey, you've got to be ready for anything when you read my crap.

[quinfinn]

jack, you know damned good and well that your poetry is not "crap" !

[Astro]

That's just him being nonsensical again Quin. The Jive Turkey!

[Jack...]

He's right...I forgot to use a capital C in Crap.

[Angel]

Another masterpiece.
As I have come to expect from you.
Magnificent write, Jack...you took me on an amazing journey...from first kiss to...where?
I loved it.
Brought back some very precious memories of my own...
Thank you.

[Jack...]

Angel, my sweet friend, thank you ever so much for your kind words. I always look forward to hearing from you.

[Angel]

As I do you, my friend. Your friendship is a blessing to me.

[Cassie]

The heading of this poem speaks it all.

[Jack...]

Thank you Cassie.

[Rita L. Sev]

We had no map for this journey
Detours were scattered the way

Love takes us to so many places, not all of them good. You have taken the reader on the complete journey of love, trials, discontent, and hopefully back again. Great write.

[Jack...]

Thank you Rita.

[Zahra]

This is the most magnificent piece, beautiful flow of feelings. Loved it.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Zahra

[Ken Simm.]

The last stanza does it for me. Ah the pathos of love, know it well. Excellent work Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Ken.

[s y e]

"Walls have been built in between us
Each day they fall but a few
Someday I know that the pathway will open
Allowing my love to walk through"

This stanza was fantastic, Jack. I loved it all but this is stanza that completely stood out for me. The way you write so flawlessly and perfectly is great. The dedication you put into each write is great.

Then, there's how each write is a little movie, playing on your screen. The images are so vivid and the wording is spectacular. You have an awesome word choice for all your writes. Your heart and soul go into each write, it's awesome.

Well done, my friend.

~ Noodle.

[Jack...]

Wow, thank you fro the super kind words my friend. You have made my Sunday special.

[s y e]

Anytime, my friend. :)