Sail on

Peaceful, the sea

 

Sail on

 

 

Of light at play…day’s end, to cease

Now mirrored of a rippled sea

Casting long in shadowed dreams

A drifting silhouette…at peace

 

Sail on, sail on,

currents feed this destined course

 

Arcs, spun gold…on dance card wings

Lemon dust, the sifted sound

Framed of flowing tangerine

Silence sings…as truth is found

 

Sail on, sail on,

captured breezes…quiet source

 

Abstract waves…in curtained sweep

Drape this ocean’s fantasy

Melodic so the depth to breathe

Champagne tints the tapestry

 

Sail on, sail on,

horizon’s beckoned rendezvous

 

Citrine jeweled on zephyr’s flight

Calmly cools in twilight feel

Motions quell the rhythm’d night

Beliefs this sun shall soon conceal

 

Sail on, sail on,

as daylight disappears from view

       

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

   

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

The photo I took this week in Key West

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Abstract waves…in curtained sweep

Drape this ocean’s fantasy

Melodic so the depth to breathe

Champagne tints the tapestry"

[Jack...]

Thank you Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

Any time...:)...........................

[Leigh]

You are lucky to live in such a beautiful place, the italics to regular fonts give a chorus verse effect, which makes it read more like a song, which I think would be a hit Jack - monumental stuff,

"Citrine jeweled on zephyr’s flight" is a particularly good line

Cheers Leigh

[Jack...]

Thanks Leigh, I appreciate your kind words.

[rhythm&blues]

The photo and your poetry go hand in hand to make one remarkable experience in your work.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much

[Kristin Lee]

This is a beautiful poem, and a great photo! The cadence and your words are very soothing. The use of color and imagery is fantastic.

[Jack...]

Thank you so muc my friend. The photo was from a recent trip.

[TL Boehm]

love the 'poem within a poem' in this piece as always your use of the ocean and of color build such a strong poem.

[Jack...]

Thanks Tammy. The photo inspired me.

[Astro]

What struck me most about this one Jack is the colorful language that you employed here more than the impact of an overall idea. This section was great,
"Arcs, spun gold…on dance card wings
Lemon dust, the sifted sound
Framed of flowing tangerine
Silence sings…as truth is found"

a fine image.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Astro

[Marie]

THis is a beautiful photo, and you've described it's colours, in a series of golds and yellows, so perfectly...

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Marie.

[Keith]

The picture fits the poem perfectly. Nice one Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Keith

[C.E.K. Nelson]

Not only are you an excellent photographer, but a GREAT poet as well!!!! This poem is extremely sophisticated- it's structure is well thought out, the words chosen exude the feeling of the subject and create a tone that is carried throughout. I think that this is a master piece and a favorite of mine!!!!!!! Thank you so much for writing this and sharing!!!!!

[Jack...]

Wow, thank you so very much for this wonderful review of my work. I am not sure I have ever had one of my pieces considered a masterpiece. I truly appreciate you visitng and am more than happy you enjoyed this. I am humbled by your kind words.

[C.E.K. Nelson]

I feel that you should probably send this piece out for publication and enter it into contests. Good luck!!

[s y e]

Wow, the description in this write, Jack was amazing! (: You have really captured the moment perfectly, my friend. Well done.

~ Noodle.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much.