I like this one. It crosses the lines between the here and now. Not just for the longing of reality but also the longing for those that are gone. That, forever wishing you were here, stamped on a beautiful postcard, that can never quite capture what is truly seen with the clarity of the eye or felt with the heart. It's simply beautiful :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Kristin, you thrill me with your words. Thank you for the smile this morning.
Such a rich blend of ideas and metaphors wrapped up in very cool descriptions Jack. I like how you break up the parts with dialogue/lines from a postcard. The sun is always shining in this one, which makes it very easy to like and to lose yourself in it. Great job.
True butterfly wings
find the side streets amazing -- these were my favorite lines...love the imagery and the feeling these two little lines evoked--true love enjoys taking detours so that there is room to soar.
The poem on a whole...I loved that as well. Great concept with the idea of the "postcard" and the way that you weaved within the stanzas the off-set lines that one could imagine seeing on a postcard. "My vacation destination is your heart"--how fantastic!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so very much my sweet friend. I just returned from Key West...the side streets were just a.. read moreThank you so very much my sweet friend. I just returned from Key West...the side streets were just as amazing if not more than the main streets.
I LOVE the first postcard text insertion "Wish you were here" and I understand continuing the theme of inserting them, but to me the following ones are just not as powerful. Strange to read this today as I stumbled across a bunch of old postcards from my Nana she gave me. Thanks as always for sharing.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much my friend. I just returned from a trip to the Keys and this was the first thing I .. read moreThank you so much my friend. I just returned from a trip to the Keys and this was the first thing I have written since I returned.
I've always loved those postcards...I like to look a them and fantasize about being there.
I like this one, Jack. It took me to far away, exotic places and brought back happy memories of times long ago.
Thank you for sharing with me!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Angel for your kind words. Happy I could inspire good memories.
I follow the smiles,
that don’t belong to me
of hot seasoned concrete
and t-shirts emblazoned
....
“My vacation destination is your heart”
....
I need a vacation. :) This poem brought such a smile to my face. Yeah, a big dorky one - best kind.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
It is always your smile that sends me to beautiful places. (even the big dorky ones) Thank you so mu.. read moreIt is always your smile that sends me to beautiful places. (even the big dorky ones) Thank you so much Tammy.
11 Years Ago
Good plan, Tammie! Why'n'cha come up to Vegas? Only about four hours from you!
Well, it's right here waiting on ya...Even if I did lie just a teensy; it's actually more like eight.. read moreWell, it's right here waiting on ya...Even if I did lie just a teensy; it's actually more like eight hours (but all freeway, so not a hard pull!)
Woo, so glad to see an RR from you, Jack! ((: Glad you're back, love to read your writes and get lost in the world you create. This was amazing! You blew me away.
"With shadows behind us
as we go out walking
to love every minute
adventures are flying..."
Hear that? That's the sound of the me being blown by the wind, ha! I loved it, it was amazing. This stanza was fantastic, loved it as always.
This poem positively sings! Reading it aloud for the second time, i hear and feel a distinct rhythm and i do mean that rather than metre. So, the adored recipient not only receives loving words from you but a ballad perhaps accompanied by an expertly played guitar! ' True butterfly wings ~ find the side streets amazing,~ hibiscus and poppy ~ and fragrances swaying.. ' how easy to close eyes and see and feel those words!' If the 'arrival' is as wonderful as your poem, there should be champagne and fireworks!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
My champagne comes when I pop the cork on your sweet review. Thank you so much Emma.
Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..