Whispering goodbye

Why?

 

Whispering goodbye

 

 

On the waves of a dream,

I lay waiting on shore,

a cold beach this night

beneath a burdened moon

crying stardust

 

I sink slowly

into the wet sand…

pleading with the waters

for answers to shamed questions,

while counting the shades of violet

framing a weeping sky

 

Thoughts flow like the tides

on an endless journey,

weaving contours and

bends deep within

this sorrow that washes

over me

 

I watch as these waves slip away,

carrying hopes still lingering

and exposing the loss

I feel, fiercely

crashing before my eyes,

in opaque foam

 

I can not move,

my body is still,

my breath salted and tethered,

as I reach

for shadows of my memories,

only to find them…

 

whispering goodbye

on the breeze

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I like the concept and metaphorical references... reality can certain drown out our dreams and wash them away. I think that is why the phrase "Sink or swim" is often used.

[Jack...]

I appreciate your kind words.

[Debbie_Philly]

Just gorgeous ... so beautifully written.... I feel every word !!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Debbie.

[Debbie_Philly]

:)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

beneath a burdened moon -- this image alone is breathtaking.

I have been in this place...grasping at straws so to speak when it comes to memories. The good ones seem to float just out of reach, and the bad ones seem to settle upon my shoulders like a wet blanket.

Always inspiring, my friend. Your imagery is tops in my book...I only wish I had half the hand for this as you do!

[Jack...]

Thank you Sarah. I always enjoy hearing from you.

Funny, I feel the same way about you.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

:) I take that as a huge compliment

[Dhaye]

Lovely free verse poem...but it's too emotional. I can feel so much pain in here because saying goodbye is the most difficult thing to do.

Why does this poem makes me sad?
Free verse always makes a bridge into my heart.

So powerful.

[Jack...]

Thank you Dhaye. I am sad today because a friend is sad and that is why I wrote this.

[J. J. Nightingale]

First class descriptive.. great imagery
I also love the painting you chose !

Touches deep, and lovely-sad... Jazz

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. I appreciate your kind words this day.

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are most welcome ... :).........

[Kristin Lee]

Very beautiful, I love the imagery. It's as if the ebb and flow of the ocean are tethered to your soul. Well done.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Kristin

[Marie]

Lovely and sad...Exquisite image of a moon crying stadust...I wish I had thought of it...

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Marie.

[Emerald Seas]

Cue to sorrow... you have a gentleness in your writing. However, each poem blossoms with a fervent emotion. This is palpable sorrow, mournful - yet carried softly to the reader. Incredible talent, Jack. Enjoyed the reading very much.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my good friend. Always a bright spot in my day is when you come to visit. Even on the cloudiest gloomy day, you bring sunshine with your kind words.

[Emerald Seas]

Awww - thank you, sweet friend! Made me smile reading that. I can't seem to write worth a darn lately, but I so enjoy coming by to read you each day (thankful that you're writing each day!). I'll be away for the weekend. I hope you have a lovely weekend and I may need to discuss San Antonio with you at some point. Emphasis on MAY - still no decisions at this point, but it's in the mix... again.

[Jack...]

I'll be here...I have a tour guide hat in my closet. :)

[Emerald Seas]

haha - first stop The Waffle Haus (??)!

[Jack...]

Magnolia Pancake House

[Emerald Seas]

Yep - that's it :)

[Jack...]

I've been hungry since I wrote that 3 hours ago.

[Emerald Seas]

Haha - well, it's right down the road. I don't know how you're not there all the time. It looked fantastic on the show. Was hit with about 20 areas to consider the other night. San Antonio was my top pick out of all of it, but there are several other spots mentioned and decided as "doable". Of course we ruled out about half of what the company sent to him. We're all over the map. I have no idea where we will actually land.

[Jack...]

Well I can tell you San Antonio is a beautiful city and very easy going. We call it Big city/Small town. It is a very proud city as well, though it is not without its problems too...like any big city. Would it be one of the bases here?

[Emerald Seas]

Oh no, Steve is retiring/transitioning from the Marines. We're looking to make a complete break from military/government and go commercial. Although he has several offers within the government realm, commercial would offer a new perspective and challenge that he is eager to delve into. You know I'm a writer/editor in my regular job. I will probably open my own company/business where ever we land:)

[Jack...]

So what would he do here, if you don't mind me asking? Obviously if this was one of the choices, there is something appealing or already offered here.

[Emerald Seas]

PM on details :)

[Zahra]

Beautiful free verse. Goodbyes are a painful topic and you've expressed it beautifully as usual. Loved the painting, really attracted me.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend.

[Rita L. Sev]

Such a touching, mournful write. I feel your heavy heart in every stanza. Beautiful images that fall like tears...

[Jack...]

Thank you Rita. I can assure you the sorrow is real.