And she smiles...

So far away, yet something new each day to share.

 

And she smiles...

 

 

Somewhere in the distance

the horizon sleeps my canvas,

dawn comes to me in a dream

 

While the sun’s early rays

touch her,

widening her sable eyes and she smiles…

 

(before these eyes of mine can see)

 

Darkness drinks my landscape

in silence as I breathe, staring,

sending my heart along this imaginary line

 

As she sips her cup,

warm within this daylight bliss

Mornings are her and she smiles…

 

(and I find a crescent moon smiling on me)

 

A glint, a faint hint of light I see

of grapefruit tint and raspberry ribbons,

like fireflies on the hill

 

She peers out the window,

runs her fingers through her hair, inhaling

blue morning glory skies, and she smiles…

 

(as I exhale the night and greet the eastern glow)

 

Pastels in salmon flow gather of my scene

and I rejoice in the new born light for at last,

across the distance, we may share the sun

 

And she smiles…

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[s y e]

Woahhhh! This is definitely my favourite of yours by far! :D I love the way you write.

I love how there is a hint of romance in this too.

“While the sun’s early rays
touch her,
widening her sable eyes and she smiles…”

-- This was gorgeous. I loved how it was quite romantic and the imagery was great too.

“A glint, a faint hint of light I see
of grapefruit tint and raspberry ribbons,
like fireflies on the hill”

-- Amazing, Jack. You blow me away with a lot of your lines, they are so from the heart and written with so much honesty and passion.

I loved how you had brackets in this write too, and the italics makes it a lot more effective. I love it.

Jack, amazing as always! :) I really loved it, thought it was a beautiful write with such a lovely meaning. You pen a familiar story of the Sun and the Moon.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. This one too is one of my favorite poems I have written. Thank you so much for you wonderful and kind review.

[Shivam Murari]

A great composition. At first I didn't get the concept of italicizing alternate stanzas. But when I read "along the imaginary line" I was convinced to believe that the smile and the girl too maybe, are imaginary. Beautiful :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much

[InsanityWriter]

Beautiful. :) I really liked the picture. It fit with your poem perfectly. ^_^

[Jack...]

I am always in awe of the sunrise. Thank you for your kind words.

[Half Dream]

I really loved this! You have a beautiful way of writing. I enjoyed reading this, it made me smile and think. :)

Very lovely write. ^_^

[Jack...]

Thank you my friend, happy it made you smile.

[Raven Cedrone]

I like how you chose to add italics to some of your sentences, bringing the piece more depth; creating a beautiful ebb and flow. I enjoyed the entirety of the piece. I thought it all came together wonderfully.

~Raven

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Raven. I am gald you enjoyed it.

[Cassie]

This poem has brought a smile on my face, thank you

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Cassie

[Kristin Lee]

I love the color and the warmth in this composition. Pastel salmon, morning glory skies, new born light, she smiles...these are all things that bring forth immense visions of light and warmth...I love it. Well done.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Kristin.

[Zahra]

this is so beautifully done. The imagery and imagery draw the readers into that world.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my sweet friend.

[Angel]

This is absolutely beautiful.
And it made me smile...

[Jack...]

Thank you so much. If you smiled then so did I.

[Frieda P]

Everything the noodlehead said, a gorgeous smile on the page this, that wraps around the heart and gently gives a little tug, and I'm *smiling*.

Sorry, couldn't help myself. :-)

[Jack...]

Then I achieved my goal. Thank you so much Frieda.