Afloat on the water

a nice spring day, a canoe, a guy and a girl

 

 

Afloat on the Water

 

 

Afloat on the water

A shiny canoe

The morning is quiet

Fresh and so new

The current does take us

Where ever it may

Afloat on the water

On this springtime day

 

Afloat on the water

Blue skies above

Serene and so simple

A picture of love

Sounds of the morning

A sweet red bird’s tune

Afloat on the water

Moment’s in bloom

 

Afloat on the water

Cool in the breeze

Slowly adrift

Beautiful trees

Lilies pad borders

Cattails stand tall

Afloat on the water

No place at all

 

Afloat on the water

A bright shining sun

Peaceful endeavor

Happy and fun

Comfortable sailing

Smooth as can be

Afloat on the water

Idyllically 

 

Afloat on the water

Nowhere to go

You in my arms

Follow the flow

Not one single worry

Breathe in the air

Afloat on the water

Nary a care

 

Afloat on the water

Easy and slow

Holding you close

Never let go

This is our morning

Such beauty to see

Afloat on the water

Just you and me

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

This is highly lyrical - I liked the repeating line - it has that 'summer day' feeling along with that wonderful romantic touch that so many of your poems have.

[Jack...]

Thank you Tammy. I am happy it brought good feelings your way.

[Magnolia]

Romantic, uplifting, and a joy to read, thanks...Maggie

[Jack...]

Thank you Maggie.

[Lily Finch]

Waooo like always very beautifully write
100/100

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[Lily Finch]

you welcome

[shivohumsohum]

perfect pathway of lettery paving stones

[Jack...]

Thanks so much. I am happy you enjoyed it.

[shivohumsohum]

yes i did. thanky.
your friend Sami directed me to you.

[Jack...]

He is a good poet

[shivohumsohum]

yes and good at argument too..almost like a lawyer:) he is a cute part of creation

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you both friends for the honor. Both are great ...:)

[shivohumsohum]

i am just a poor poet who portrays the ancient mendicant in my works

[Zahra]

This poem really brightened my heart, at this time of night, I feel myself in a canoe ride towards peace. Thanks for sharing.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much. How is the fashion design going? Did you pick a theme?

[Zahra]

it's going nice. :)

[Lily Finch]

fashion dsgng ki khbrain tou door door tak pheli hui hain ;)

[Marie]

A lovely, springtime canoe ride...

[Jack...]

Thanks Marie

[Rita L. Sev]

Your poem is like a lullaby, rocking me to a peaceful night's rest. Mother Nature must love you, Jack; you make her look so good!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Rita

[Frieda P]

This lulls me into a pure sense of security, just floating on the sweetness of true love. If this were a dance it'd be a waltz on water.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my sweet friend. I appreciate you leaving such kind words for me.

[Sami Khalil]

"Comfortable sailing

Smooth as can be

Afloat on the water

Idyllically



Afloat on the water

Nowhere to go

You in my arms

Follow the flow

Not one single worry

Breathe in the air

Afloat on the water

Nary a care"
You have captured the moment marvelously and the imagery float with beauty ordained by Mother nature. A great write Jack...:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Sami. I am the fortunate one for I can call you friend.

[Sami Khalil]

The feelings are mutual...:)

[Angi]

I want to be on the water, just my love and I! I can feel the breeze on my face. Lovely, Jack!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Angi. I just posted this. I have a few dark ones coming, so I thought I'd lighten up a little first :) I appreciate you taking the time to read my work.

[Angi]

I look forward to reading what is to come.