"Float to me"

A vision calls...

 

                              “Float to me”

 

 

Changing directions

In a forestalled motion,

balanced on the side of truth while practicing losing my step

in the rushing waters of life…

I slip

 

Clinging to a lone branch

I find it blocking the sky, pulling shadows from mist

and teetering on the edge of someone’s sacred sanity

 

My eyes,

stern and fashioned of blinded occurrences that swallow

the light of day and the masks of sympathetic stares,

focus

 

For in the distance,

tapestries woven of heartbeats glisten on the ripples of a naked moon beam,

motioning to me in pleasing movements a’ dance on its reflections

 

Passionately in syncopated volumes she whispers,

louder than the hope now swirling in the rising swells

and broken slivers of drastic wastelands which

sit vacant in my mind

 

“Float to me”,

I hear as the cool waters so elegantly gather about her perfect feet

Her toes grip the rocky floor in such beauty that I fall helplessly,

allowing nature’s crest to take me, singing me sweetly to this pristine dream

 

Disbelief churns in fountains of doubt fed wishes and desires

as I submerge in the beauty that is her

Engulfed by white capped rapids beating faster…only my heart

She, with silken fingers plucks me from the surf,

her fragrance, lilac and magnolia, intoxicate me

 

We stand, shades of the deep sky and starlight beacons illume her face

As fireflies play in the trees and

our lips meet, my pulse floods with fever

 

Her desperate thoughts invade my elated mind and I agree

Together we plunge to the depths of forever and I slowly drown in her love

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Constance Payne]

Love this. Initially hoping for something to save you. Then knowing that drowning in love is not all bad.

Such vivid imaginings.

[Cassie]

This is what I wanted, thank you for granting my wish Jack, this is great imagery, I loved reading the whole poem.

[Jack...]

Anything for you Cassie. Thanks so much.

[Zahra]

This is a really interesting piece, beautiful title and imagery. Thanks for another unique piece

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my sweet friend.

[Angi]

Beautiful, beautiful love story. 'Float to me' is a lovely title for this.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Angi. Sometimes I don't know which is more fun, writing the poem or deciding on the title.

[Shivam Murari]

This poem portrays an effective use of metaphorical imagery! Finished with finesse! :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much.

[Shivam Murari]

:)

[InsanityWriter]

Wonderfully done. :) Great work!! :D

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend.

[TL Boehm]

mermaids. OY! To be engulfed in love. To surrender to it....at your own demise. WOW. It is a wonderful poetic story

[Jack...]

Tammy, wow, you are making me blush today. thank you so much.

[QuietlyCrash]

I absolutely adore your poems. This one is so beautiful and the emotion it holds is wonderful. Loved it! Great job!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words.

[Kristin Lee]

"I slowly drown in her love." Very powerful! Each sentence holds such bold professions, but that last line hold such truth...

There was a grammatical error that stood out to me on the first read. "Float to me" - if you use a comma after the qutations marks, the comma needs to be within the qutations since its not a complete sentence. Not outside of the quotes as you have it now. But that's just my own OCD noticing that.

Otherwise I love your words, as I have everything else you've written.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much. Oops. I do that from time to time, my brain does not work as fast as my fingers. Thanks.

[Souladareatease]

A deep write You penned Jack, It smacks of automatic writes-was it so?
it flows very easily, and longer than Your usual, this tale sucked me in and I didn't want to leave, reading it over and over--Beautiful!!!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much sir, I am trying to write more free-verse.

[Souladareatease]

Looks good Jack!!! rolls smooth!!!