Slice

When someone says "Friends forever" watch your back

 

 

 

 

 

Slice,

skin falls open and blood does ooze

 

Slash,

this pain my friend, it’s what I choose

 

Cut,

nerves they tingle with senses running

 

Stab,

in the back, I didn’t see that coming

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[jkhatz]

Jack, you were, more than once, brutally honest with me. Now I feel it's time to return the favor.

Whether you write it in a poem or you use a far more direct approach (as I did) you're still stirring the s**t. However, what I find hilarious is that you attacked me for defending myself, in my own fight. This little war doesn't even concern you, or any of us. You may think it does but I assure you, this is not your battle. I know that you love getting all worked up when you hear any passing battle cry, no matter how faint, and maybe that's something you need to question, but, from one friend to another, with much respect, I'm telling you I think you need to leave this one alone.

As to the poem, well, what can I say? The words speak well enough for themselves.

[Jack...]

The funny thing is, this was written about me and something that happened in my office and for some reason it has struck a nerve. Sorry if it offended anyone. I really don't know half of the stuff that goes on around here and I really didn't attack you, I thought I was being helpful at the time. I tried to be courteous about it and when it didn't seem to turn out that way I moved on. Though I did take offense to some of the stuff I received in my inbox, and I did say something about that, but still I forget quickly. My friend, I never had anything against you and still don't. But, I write what I feel at the time, usually based on personal experiences and if someone takes it the wrong way, there is nothing I can do about it. Even the crap that started because of this poem, if you noticed, I stayed far away from that.

[quinfinn]

really jack? then why don't you explain frieda's comments on this write to my friend jkhatz...don't fancy you much as a liar, it doesn't suit your character. keep following hatred and you will lose more than one friend. i say this as a friendly warning from one who respected you and was treated with disdain and disrespect. careful, when you handle a venomous viper. you might get bitten...i did.

[Jack...]

Why don't you explain Frieda's comments to your friend. I am not Frieda.

And if you are calling me a liar, we now have a problem.

And speaking of snakes, you removed me from your friend list, no reasons, no comments, no nothing, like a snake in the grass.

[quinfinn]

we had a problem before that....so gallant you are , to be forth coming with truth. when you chose to ignore me i got your message loud and clear...i only facilitated what you desired...now that is a crying shame...be that as it may, your choice, not mine.

[Jack...]

I don't recall ignoring you but if that is your reasoning, then I guess that is your choice and if we have a problem, then we have a problem. What that problems is I suppose you will tell me if you want and if not, no big deal. I personally could care less.

[jkhatz]

Normally, I wouldn't butt in but because I'm getting notifications of all of your replies, I was compelled to read. Jack, you've made a very common error in your comment above, one I detest. Saying you, "could care less," is wrong. You want to say you, "couldn't care less." Allow me to explain. If you could care less, that means that there are many things about it that bothers you. If you simply couldn't care less, that would mean that you don't give a s**t.

For further study, please refer to John Cleese and his brilliant podcast, with charts! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uCUsPnKD1gk

[jkhatz]

Double post.

[Jack...]

Makes perfect sense...thank you.

[Jack...]

Correction to original: I couldn't care less

[quinfinn]

jack, i sent you a pm, explaining my position and asking you what the deal was. it was deleted and ignored. now, i know i didn't delete it, so logic follows that it must have been you....i tried, in earnest, to uncomplicate things and and reach a conclusion satisfactory to all parties...ignored and disappeared...what was i to believe after that? i assumed it was a line in the sand, so i subsequently unfriended you to avoid future woes and misunderstandings....you asked (indirectly) so i have answered...directly

[Jack...]

Quinn, I really do not know how you would know if I deleted a PM or not, but maybe you can...however, I still have the PM (which means I did not delete it) and I can assure you ( I just re-read it) it asked no question. It was just a statement that in my opinion did not require a reply at the time because I really wanted to stay out of all of this. I really don't know why you feel like you have to drag me into this. I have been as polite as I can through all of this and if you just want to fight with someone, pick someone else. This thread was a discussion between JKHatz and myself in regards to a poem that I wrote. No one asked you to jump in and give your two cents. If you want to review the poem, then do so and if you think it sucks, then so be it.

[quinfinn]

my whole point is, and has been, i don't want a fight with anyone....and you can be as trifling and abrasive as you like...i still respect the poet within you, always will, i just don't understand the actions leading up to this insanity....i guess i had a much higher opinion of you than you did me...it's okay. i am done, and never again will i put in another cent....peace.

[Kacie Delane Davis]

please act like adults...thank you.

[Todd Mc' Callough]

Nice work here. I liked the use of the different aspects of a cut. This poem makes complete sense towards being back stabbed. The last line is the most powerful, i felt and works the best here.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much George. I appreciate you stopping by

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Such a good metaphor right now, I think. I've been stabbed in the back and through the heart...neither is enjoyable.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much, I really just wrote based on past experiences, but...

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Yeah...it happens

[Angi]

Wow. Goosebumps, man.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Angi

[LadySoDivine]

Very few lines containing such strong meaning. I can very much relate to this poem. I never really had a true friend in my life, regardless that all of them said how "they would always be there". I don't think I need to tell you what happened with that promise. You captured the subject amazingly in this, great job! :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much LSD and you can consider me your friend.

[LadySoDivine]

Thank you, Jack, that means a lot :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The lines are stripped of over descriptive measures which lends to the impact, well done, good read.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for reading and leaving such a nice review

[redflutterby]

Some of the best poems have few lines or words. This was concise in its impact. Cuts like a knife Jack!!

[Jack...]

Hurts so good. Thanks my friend

[Kristin Lee]

Ah, good one! At first it feels like your talking about a "Cutter." The emotional attachment of someone who likes the pain of cutting into their own skin as a form of release. And then the knife is flipped and it becomes a weapon, used against them. Perhaps when someone divulges their secret to a doctor...

Or...it could translate to love since love hurts deliciously, until our hearts get broke...

What thought provocation :) Great job!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much and your first response was pretty close. Thank you for reading.

[icelandicblue]

Oh dear...

[Jack...]

I guess you never know what your poem just might do.

[icelandicblue]

Words can hurt you no matter what the rhyme says.

[AlexValkyrie]

Painfully true. I've experienced more than my fair share of backstabbings. It is one of my most desperate hopes that I haven't caused anyone this kind of pain.

Excellent work. Well done.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my new friend