Slice

Slice

A Poem by Jack...
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When someone says "Friends forever" watch your back

"

 

 

 

 

 

Slice,

skin falls open and blood does ooze

 

Slash,

this pain my friend, it’s what I choose

 

Cut,

nerves they tingle with senses running

 

Stab,

in the back, I didn’t see that coming

© 2013 Jack...


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Jack...
Thank you for reading

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Jack, you were, more than once, brutally honest with me. Now I feel it's time to return the favor.

Whether you write it in a poem or you use a far more direct approach (as I did) you're still stirring the s**t. However, what I find hilarious is that you attacked me for defending myself, in my own fight. This little war doesn't even concern you, or any of us. You may think it does but I assure you, this is not your battle. I know that you love getting all worked up when you hear any passing battle cry, no matter how faint, and maybe that's something you need to question, but, from one friend to another, with much respect, I'm telling you I think you need to leave this one alone.

As to the poem, well, what can I say? The words speak well enough for themselves.

Posted 11 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Jack...

11 Years Ago

Quinn, I really do not know how you would know if I deleted a PM or not, but maybe you can...however.. read more
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

my whole point is, and has been, i don't want a fight with anyone....and you can be as trifling and .. read more
Kacie Delane Davis

11 Years Ago

please act like adults...thank you.



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amazing :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank you
Excellent pen upon trust---it can bite You in the a*s- yet the kind heart always wishes to.


Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much
Short and powerful. I love the color and format. The imagery makes me think of someone being hurt and harming themselves and also of another who is hurt by someone else. Great poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much
i love this piece, it's simplicity mixed with such depth.
nicely written

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank you so very much Allura
If one has been out in the world more than ten minutes, this has, unfortunately, been their experience at least once. We really never see it coming, but it may just teach us valuable lessons, and make us hold our true friends closer. Powerful piece, Jack.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Rita.
This was in my PM inbox, Jack...are you trying to give me a hint? xD I mean, I know I've been neglecting my RR queue lately but I'll get to it *laugh*

Okay. I'd be remiss if I didn't mention the typo right off the bat-ola..."skin falls opens" should read "skin falls open" or "skins fall open", although I'd go with the former as opposed to the latter in this case.

I like the last line a lot. Who amongst us hasn't fallen victim to this wound? Really powerful piece in its pithiness. Thanks so much for the PM...I appreciate it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Gawd, I nearly genuflected. *laugh*
Jack...

11 Years Ago

Well there was this sheep...oh nevermind.
KAOlmsted

11 Years Ago

xD
All kinds of physical pain, back stabbing is the worst, you can't see your wounds and it's unexpected. This is really true and it happens in daily life. great write Mr. Jack.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Marc.
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TLK
"nerves they tingle with senses running" seems awkward to me.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TLK

11 Years Ago

Yes, that is what you wrote. That's why I'm reviewing it.
Jack...

11 Years Ago

Just out of curiosity...I have 250 poems and stories on this site, what made you choose this one to .. read more
TLK

11 Years Ago

It was on the "writing" page in one of the boxes.
Jack, you were, more than once, brutally honest with me. Now I feel it's time to return the favor.

Whether you write it in a poem or you use a far more direct approach (as I did) you're still stirring the s**t. However, what I find hilarious is that you attacked me for defending myself, in my own fight. This little war doesn't even concern you, or any of us. You may think it does but I assure you, this is not your battle. I know that you love getting all worked up when you hear any passing battle cry, no matter how faint, and maybe that's something you need to question, but, from one friend to another, with much respect, I'm telling you I think you need to leave this one alone.

As to the poem, well, what can I say? The words speak well enough for themselves.

Posted 11 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Jack...

11 Years Ago

Quinn, I really do not know how you would know if I deleted a PM or not, but maybe you can...however.. read more
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

my whole point is, and has been, i don't want a fight with anyone....and you can be as trifling and .. read more
Kacie Delane Davis

11 Years Ago

please act like adults...thank you.
Hmmm... Why do I feel this relates to me so well? Yet, I don't know who did the stabbing or why. That nagging, gut feeling doesn't go away easily for this fighter.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the gift of you...how goes it?
Emerald Seas

11 Years Ago

Ehhhh... It's interesting. Ups and then some stall outs here and there... Time takes a toll :)
Jack...

11 Years Ago

Time can be a teacher and a healer
so many things I've learned from time

Lyrics f.. read more

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Added on May 3, 2013
Last Updated on May 4, 2013
Tags: knife, cut, stab, back

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Jack...
Jack...

San Antonio, TX



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Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..

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