Slice

Slice

A Poem by Jack...
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When someone says "Friends forever" watch your back

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Slice,

skin falls open and blood does ooze

 

Slash,

this pain my friend, it’s what I choose

 

Cut,

nerves they tingle with senses running

 

Stab,

in the back, I didn’t see that coming

© 2013 Jack...


Author's Note

Jack...
Thank you for reading

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Jack, you were, more than once, brutally honest with me. Now I feel it's time to return the favor.

Whether you write it in a poem or you use a far more direct approach (as I did) you're still stirring the s**t. However, what I find hilarious is that you attacked me for defending myself, in my own fight. This little war doesn't even concern you, or any of us. You may think it does but I assure you, this is not your battle. I know that you love getting all worked up when you hear any passing battle cry, no matter how faint, and maybe that's something you need to question, but, from one friend to another, with much respect, I'm telling you I think you need to leave this one alone.

As to the poem, well, what can I say? The words speak well enough for themselves.

Posted 11 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Jack...

11 Years Ago

Quinn, I really do not know how you would know if I deleted a PM or not, but maybe you can...however.. read more
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

my whole point is, and has been, i don't want a fight with anyone....and you can be as trifling and .. read more
Kacie Delane Davis

11 Years Ago

please act like adults...thank you.



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I felt this, Jack. Every stab and every cut. Ouch! Powerful write. I don't have 'friends forever' they either leave, stop talking or we fall out....

Posted 10 Years Ago


Jack...

10 Years Ago

Thanks my friend. This one caused a lot of problems at the time.
OUCH! There is much pain in this. I seldom read the top line in quotes; but went back to understand what this was directed to. It could have been so many different things. Friendship betrayal is a harsh one that is for sure.
I was one told to keep my friends at arms length and my enemies much closer due to the danger from my friends.
Sending positive thoughts to you my internet-friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks Constance, this is rather an old piece but famous for the fire it started without a match. I .. read more
Constance Payne

11 Years Ago

You are welcome. I am not sure I am back per se`....writing is easy....getting it onto the computer.. read more
Betrayal is brutal, your poem went right to the sharp point of it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much.
That brutally violent. You chose brilliant words and then defined what they do when someone betrays you, whether in one way or the other. An honest poem! Nicely done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so very much. I appreciate you stopping by.
Shivam Murari

11 Years Ago

:)
I've written a few poems about betrayal, this is way better then all my attempts! ;) Great work, I enjoyed reading this!! ^_^

Posted 11 Years Ago


InsanityWriter

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your vote of confidence! ;) I'll see it I can post some of it soon, I've been super busy,.. read more
Jack...

11 Years Ago

Ok, Let me know when you do.
InsanityWriter

11 Years Ago

Sure thing! ;)
OUCH. been there. And I concur with you, friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks Tammy...seems someone took offense to this one. I guess I should have had the mature warning .. read more
I can totally relate to this. Betrayal is never expected. Great poem

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so very much
Good poem as usual , great job Jack

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend.
Acucena G.

11 Years Ago

you are welcome my friend
I dig


Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks
Oh, a piece about FRENEMIES. This just reminded me to be careful these days. i guess, you would never know who among your so-called friends will stab your back the next day. You just beautifully penned a sad reality.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Jack...

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Gabrielle.

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Added on May 3, 2013
Last Updated on May 4, 2013
Tags: knife, cut, stab, back

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Jack...
Jack...

San Antonio, TX



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Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..

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