Peep Hole Shadows

Open me, I am yours

 

 

 

 

Peep Hole Shadows

 

Framed by affections,

unlocked, waiting...

weathered of vibrant

thoughts and dead bolt

delusions

 

A portal of desperate

desires and relinquished

 pain, for the light

through my cracks and crevices

now shines

 

My heart is hinged,

eternally,

by brass pins of endless dreams,

tightly fitting into

the perfect grooves of

 your love

 

Twist with simple ease

my handle, dull and waiting

for the sheen of you

ever bright, glowing

to polish me,

to make me

new

 

Open me,

swing me freely,

so smoothly I move

allowing the morning breeze to sift

beyond peep hole shadows

creating a passage

so that I may

walk so deeply

 into you

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

A creaking gate lasts lngest they say. And this one makes the best sounds. Not that you are a creaking gate but this is the best poetry.

[Jack...]

Wow, thanks so much Ken. I am happy you enjoyed it.

[InsanityWriter]

Please put all your works in a book and publish it... I'd buy it, and I could probably read your work all day... Excellent poem, I love the imagery. Great work!! ^_^

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my sweet friend for your kind and flattering words to me. perhaps someday i will do just that.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I can't talk for others, but I founs myself wanting to peep through them all, well done, good read.

[Jack...]

I appreciate you stopping by so much today. Thanks for the kind words.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Your welcome

[Acucena G.]

beautiful, touching , innovative , its just Jack's way of writing

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much

[TL Boehm]

the extended metaphor in this is sublime. especially "dead bolt delusions" and the entire last verse.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much. I am trying to learn the art of free-verse.

[TL Boehm]

I'd say - you've mastered it.

[s y e]

I absolutely love the structure of this write! The wording and flow is excellent! Loved it. The title is amazing, I loved it. Picture is cute too. Amazing work as always, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my fine friend.

[Sami Khalil]

"My heart is hinged,

eternally,

by brass pins of endless dreams,

tightly fitting into

the perfect grooves of

your love



Twist with simple ease

my handle"
Wow. Again you write in excellence and with simple ease but peeping throw the doors of your words we find all beauty and magic. I like so much the fact that you are so versatile and creative ... Always a pleasure reading your work Jack...:)

"

[Jack...]

Thank you very much kind Sir. It is great praise coming from as gifted a poet as you.

[Sami Khalil]

The feelings are mutual...:)

[Augustus]

You have chosen an astounding metaphor to be the central figure in your poem. And you have made lovely use of its various facets to describe the nuances of love. As such, many of the lines and phrases are uniquely creative; "dead bolt delusions", "brass pins of endless dreams" and "dull and waiting for the sheen of you", to name a few, not to mention the titular "peep hole shadows".
The concluding lines are beautiful too. They are also counter-intuitive.
"creating a passage
so that I may
walk so deeply
into you"
Since you're the door here, I'd have expected you to carve a passage for your love to walk deeply into you, rather than the other way round. So I am quite intrigued by your phrasing.

Thank you for a lovely poem, Jack! :)

[Jack...]

Augustus, thank you so much for this wonderful review and you are correct, as I wrote this I had the same feeling, but it was I who wanted and not the other way around, at least in my mind. It does present a sort of cunundrum, but then again it is poetry. perhaps I am not so much the door, but more of the shadow.

[Augustus]

You're welcome Jack! And of course, there are many ways of looking at it. I appreciate your viewpoint.

[Veronica Chandler]

This piece is such a hopeful bright spot and filled with lovely thoughts to lift; with changes on the horizon.
"A portal of desperate
desires and relinquished
pain, for the light..."
Such a wonderful way to start my day.

[Jack...]

Veronica, my friend. Thank you so very much for your always kind and caring words.

[Holly Mason]

love that title!
this is one of my favorites of yours
dull and waiting-well if this the dull you what is the brilliantly shinning like of you*)
to offer yourself up for love in a way to take the others pain and hurt just shows what kind of gentleman you really are-we see what you are made of in this piece
thank you for sharing fine sir

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Holly, it is always a beautiful day when I hear from you.