The Giant's Lament

The true story of the bean stalk

 

 

 

The Giant’s Lament

 

The giant stomped a thunderous stomp

Then cried a thousands tears

Flooding out the land below

A rain that lasted years

 

For out there in his garden

Where only weeds did grow

Nothing sprouted from the seed

This giant he did sow

 

He toiled for many hours

Tilled the soil soft

Fertilized and watered it

Still nothing grew aloft

 

His sadness it was growing

The rain a steady stream

He cried so loud he couldn’t hear

The ones below him scream

 

For down there in the village

The river crest was bound

Breaking down the barriers

Placed there by the town

 

Jack had an idea

He took some magic beans

Planted them deep in the ground

And watched them grow so green

 

He climbed this stalk of nature

Until he found his quest

He asked the giant, “Why the tears

It’s making such a mess?”

 

The giant sat there whimpering

For he could barely talk

When then he spoke, the faintest tone

“I wanted a bean stalk”

 

Jack said, “I have one growing

It’s big enough for two

I’ll cultivate the lower half

The top I’ll give to you”

 

The giant stopped his crying

He was no longer sad

For now he had a bean stalk

And for that he was glad

 

Jack was now a hero

A statue in cement

Dedicated to his cure

For the giant’s sad lament

Author's Note

Thanks you reading.

Reviews

[Eileenws]

Very enjoyable poem. Nicely done. I wrote a short story about Jack. It is called "Jack Gets Stopped." Eileen

[Jack...]

Hey Eileen, that's not fair. :)>

Thank you so much

[lolawants]

i think i like urs better :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much...better than what?

[lolawants]

lol the real one :)

[Jack...]

Oh, thank even more now. :)

[Helen Crutchett]

Such a 'cool' little write! Penned as only JACK can, and thoroughly enjoyed by me.

thank you,


Helena :)

[Jack...]

Thank you Helena, I wrote it for your contest so I had to make sure it was good.

[Ken Simm.]

Fee fie fo fum. I smell the lines of a really good pome. Alright doesn't scan but I tried. Good work Jack.

[Jack...]

It was great, thank you sir.

[gabrielle]

Jack and the Beanstalk with a twist. I had to laugh at the scene of a giant's crying and stomping. I enjoyed this fun write! Thanks for sharing

[Jack...]

Thank you for your kind words. I am happy you enjoyed it.

[Sami Khalil]

Awesome story Jack done with artistic talent ...Pen on...:)

[Jack...]

Thank you my friend

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Love this! A great twist on an old favorite - we never give that poor giant a thought. a clever and fun story!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much

[Mark]

I guess my sympathy for the "poor giant" faded with the lines, "I smell the blood of an Englishman", and, "I'll grind his bones to make my bread"!

[Jack...]

This Jack isn't English, so he's not worried.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

So nice! I loved the story aspect of this one. So clever are your lines and the little world that you have created. I love being "transported" by a poem, and this one certainly transported me to places that I didn't imagine. Clever, witty, beautiful and a pleasure to read.

The giant sat there whimpering
For he could barely talk
When then he spoke, the faintest tone
"I wanted a bean stalk."--love this stanza!!!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend

[TL Boehm]

I am a schmuck for "fairy tales" well ok. I'm just a schmuck. This reminded me of a scene in Alice in Wonderland where in Alice finds herself swimming in a pool of tears. Mechanically this reads very well, an homage to nursery rhymes - but the story - a great original take on the Beanstalk tale. Yup! Liked it much.

[Jack...]

Thanks, I wrote it for a contest here on WC. Helena's new Blue Rose Cafe contest. Thanks for reading and offering such sweet words to me.

[Marie]

Excellent twist on "Jack and the Beanstalk."

Two suggestions:
I think the first line would make more sense if it read: The giant stoped a thunderous stomp.

In the last line of the second stanza I think you meant "sow" instead of "sew".

[Jack...]

Thanks Marie. I changed sew to sow, just so you know. but I think I want to leave stomp as stomp. Thanks for the help.

[Marie]

Sorry; I made a mistake here. I was thinking of changine "and" to "a".

[Jack...]

So right you are once again. Marie, I don't know what I would do without your red pencil. I will fix that now.